akrolsmir wrote:

General:
You need a background for this to be ranked.
Cut the mp3 file if you're not going to use all of it.
// I knew that I need a background but I can't find the good one. I wil find it soon. mp3 file don't need to be cut because dksslqj's Extra is for approval and will be use full mp3 file.

Hard:
00:05:418 (2) - Would be prettier if less angular // fixed
00:16:134 (1) - Looks weird overlapping onto (4), perhaps move? // I tried to fix it but them the map need whole change of spacing. may be no problem. I will consider this if other modders point out this again.
00:22:421 (1) - The end of this slider doesnt' coincide with anything. Try going into 1/6th and readjusting the length. I'd also think it'd make more sense as 2 circles rather than a slider. //fixed with 1/6 slider. And.... 2circles with 1/6 will be little bit harsh for the hard diff. Also, 1/6 distanced two circles are hard to point out the exact beat. I think slider is better.
01:07:141 (3) - Same as 00:05:418 (2). Also try and get it symmetric. // fixed. trying to get it symmetric.... but somehow... hard to be symmetric.
01:23:858 (3) - Less angular, more like an arc on a circle? // fixed
01:26:430 (4) - ^ // fixed
02:07:150 (1) - Replace with just a circle here. // fixed
02:08:436 (3,4) - Their bottoms are farther apart than the top, fix if you're aiming for symmetry. //fixed
02:17:437- 02:32:439 - This part was quite fun, but I kept on feeling as though somehow the timing was off. Whether in the offset or space between beats or something, I couldn't lay my finger on it. // I feell same thing with you. When I play this song with slow speed it slightly do not fit with notes. I think there may be some problem with bpm or offset. I will try to fix it.
02:21:723 (4) - Less angular, more like an arc on a circle? // fixed
03:08:873 (2) - ^ // fixed

Didn't mod Insane, but I noticed it's only a minute. It'd be good if you could contact the creator and map it to about the same length as hard.

Anyways, nice patterns (though I didn't think much of the song), starred!

Samah wrote:

[General]
MP3 bitrate is too high for ranking. Downsample it to 192kbps, and maybe find a shorter version that matches your map length, unless you plan on mapping the entire thing.
Your hitsounds could use some work, at the moment it all sounds very random. You can use any hitsound suggestions as a guideline for the whole map set if you want. Also don't forget that sliders don't need to have the same hitsound for each end and repeat!
Remove commas from your tags. Tags in osu! should be separated with spaces instead.

[Normal]
DR, AR, OD and CS +1
Circles way too big for Normal! D:

00:07:133 (4) - Add whistle to the repeat arrow.
00:09:704 (2) - Remove whistle from the start, only have it on the end.
00:10:562 (3) - Add whistle to the end.
00:11:419 (4) - Add whistle to the repeat arrow.
00:13:133 (2) - Whistle.
00:16:563 (3) - Whistle.
00:16:991 (1) - Only have a whistle at the end (no whistle for start and repeat arrow).
00:24:278 (1,1) - This *might* be too soon after the spinner for Normal (although at 2.95 star it's more like a difficult easy).
00:26:850 (1) - Remove whistle from repeat arrow (only have whistle on start and end).
00:29:422 (2) - Whistle.
00:33:708 (1) - Change repeat arrow from finish to whistle.
00:34:565 (2) - Add note on the end of the slider? (with finish)
00:35:422 (4) - Add whistle at end of the slider.
00:36:280 (5) - Remove clap.
00:37:566 (1) - Add whistle to the start.
00:38:423 (2) - Remove whistle from the end.
00:39:280 (3) - ^
00:40:566 (1) - Maybe shorten the slider to be 1½ beats (bounce on the blue tick). Make the start/repeat/end hitsounds finish/whistle/finish, and add a note at [00:41:423] with a finish.
00:41:852 (2) - Change the start from a whistle to a clap, remove the whistle from the repeat, but leave the whistle on the end.
00:43:566 (4) - Clap.
00:44:424 (6) - Remove finish, add whistle.
00:44:852 (1) - Remove whistle from start, and change the end to a clap.
00:45:710 (2) - Remove whistle from start.
00:46:567 (3) - Add a whistle to the repeat arrow.
00:47:853 (4) - Remove all claps. Add whistle to the start and finish to the end.
00:48:710 (1) - Maybe silence the end of the spinner?
00:53:425 (1,2,3) - Too many finishes! D:
01:05:427 (2,3) - These claps are inappropriate, I think.
01:17:857 (3) - Might want to remove this finish.
01:19:572 (2) - Noisy!
01:37:145 (2,4) - ^
01:48:290 (1) - Finish
02:28:581 (1) - Nasty claps.
02:42:298 (3) - Noisy.
02:44:869 (8) - Remove clap, you only need a finish on this.
02:58:586 (1) - Remove clap, add finish.
02:59:872 (3) - Whistle.
03:01:157 (6) - ^

[Hard]
A lot of spacing inconsistencies here.
00:03:704 (4) - Much too high. The health meter covers it up during play.
00:15:169 (2,3) - Not snapped to the end of the slider. Put distance spacing on 0.0x, and disable grid snap (hold shift).
00:22:421 (1) - This note is too short and in a weird place. Try this:

SPOILER

00:24:707 (1) - Remove clap and maybe silence the end of this spinner?
00:37:137 (5) - Noisy!
00:40:566 (5) - ^
00:44:852 (1,2,3,4) - Not symmetrical. I can see the gap between 1 and 2 is way too small.
00:57:711 (3) - Too high.
00:58:569 (1,2,3) - Too spaced out.
01:01:140 (5,6,7,8) - Too squished up.
01:16:893 (2) - Remove finish.
01:19:572 (2,3,4) - Noisy.
01:22:143 (1) - ^
01:24:715 (4,5,6) - ^
01:27:716 (1,2,3,4) - Move all of these down a bit so that (1) is on the same path as slider (5). By this, I mean the slider "points" to it.
01:35:431 (3) - Noisy.
01:37:145 (2,3,5,6,7) - ^
01:47:004 (4) - ^
01:48:290 (1) - Remove whistle. You only really need one hitsound on an object. Any more and it sounds messy.
02:00:292 (1) - Remove clap, maybe silence the end.
02:11:007 (1) - Remove clap.
02:19:151 (1,2,3) - This rhythm doesn't fit the music.
02:20:866 (1,2) - Noisy.
02:24:724 (6) - ^
02:26:438 (5) - ^
02:30:296 (5) - ^
02:44:012 (6,7) - ^
03:12:731 (1) - Silence the end?

[dksslqj's Extra]
I don't want to make too many comments on this map since it's still a work in progress.
CS -1? I think the circles are too small.
Also, do your hitsounds as you map rather than all at the end. For me at least, it helps a lot to get a feel for the flow of the song.
00:18:290 (4,5,6) - Why the silence here?

Star because I think it has potential.

Soul-less wrote:

Finally modding after a full week plus two days. Damn I'm lazy. xP

[General]
As a reminder(since this is still a WIP)
- Check your timing(Yours and dksslqj differs, use same timing for every difficulty). I personally find dksslqj's timing more accurate(140 bpm, 290 offset).
- Check notes resnapping as long as you change your bpm and offset.
- Check your storyboard: I see some random stuffs like bg.jpg as sprites which...uh, don't think you have any)
- Find a background.
- Check tags: Is Hard your difficulty? Confused at Thssy-U's post, was it a mod post? Mapping style on Normal and Hard is quite different too.
- Soft hitsound works great here.(Listen to dksslqj's Extra's hitsounds)

[Normal]
- 00:24:278 (1) - End at 00:27:707 sounds better?
- Between 00:19:349 (1) and 00:24:278 (1) - Kinda empty here. If it's a break, then nevermind.
- 02:40:154 (3,4) - A sudden jump. Uh.
- 03:10:587 (2,3) - Another sudden jump. >_<

[Hard]
- 00:11:419 (3) - Adjust the slider, or move it one grid left, one grid up.
- 00:15:705 (4,1,2) - Readjust the positioning here? Looks crowded, not nice.
- 00:22:421 (1) - I'd prefer two beats(The short slider looks weird), and also on 00:22:349 and 00:22:456(1/4 snapping).
- 00:34:565 (1,2,3,4) - Sounds better with the setting below?

- 00:38:851 (3,4) and 00:42:281 (3,4) - Looks better with curve sliders, in my opinion.
- 00:44:852 (1,2,3,4,5) - Might want to consider a Pentagon or Star shaped formation.
- 00:59:854 (5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - (5,6,7,8) is partially hidden by comboburst of slider (5) as shown in the screenshot below. Try to prevent this.

SPOILER

- 01:02:855 (3,4) - Similar case as above, combobursts. Try another position.

Saw a lot of improvements compared to when you initially requested for mod(When there's only Hard and dksslqj's Extra), good luck with your first map(I think?). Not starring yet due to WIP map, but feel free to ask for rechecks when you're done with your map(Just post me a reminder in my queue).