1. Dis (3.29 stars, 234 notes)
2. KPY (4.84 stars, 447 notes)
3. Relaxing (1.61 stars, 170 notes)

goodbye wrote:

add KiritanP (きりたんP是Doriko的P名

[KPY]

开头钢琴段我觉得既然你80%都跟了钢琴为什么有些地方又要滑掉?

00:03:445 (5) - 减掉一个折返
00:04:160 (6) - add a note
00:09:636 (2) - 改成1/2slider
00:12:017 (3,4) - 这两个都后移1/2
00:12:969 (1) - 改成1/2slider或者折返或者slider+note make it on purpose
00:16:779 (2) - 减掉折返 换成两个note或者1个都随便你
00:18:683 (7) - ^ 這個加了折返感覺會自然一點
00:52:255 (4) - 还是补个note比较好不然很空

00:59:398 (x) - add note 不行啦..這裏人聲off掉了,打起來會對不上vocal.
00:59:874 (x) - ^Same.
01:00:350 (x) - ^..
01:00:826 (x) - ^..
01:01:064 (x) - 往后移1/2
01:02:017 (x)- add note

01:10:826 (4) - 增加1/2长度 并且如果是我这里会用0.5x I'm follow the vocal here.
01:14:636 (7) - ^^
01:15:350 (2) - a明显在红线 我觉得没道理这样带过去 改成1/2slider+note吧
01:21:064 (4) - 整个都是跟随vocal走可是为什么要在这里反而带掉?跟前面的方法类似就不多说了
01:27:255 (1,2,3,4) - 这边加的很违和 想加2连这样的也不是这么加的 改成这样

SPOILER

01:33:207 (8) - 结束的地方后移1/2 spin随着改
01:45:469 (9) - 后移1/4或者删掉 加在这里违和感
01:47:731 (4) - 这边开始的节奏是轻快 而钢琴是长重音 感觉整个反掉了 大概这样加比较贴

SPOILER

02:13:683 (8) - 增加1/2长度 同前面一样 這裏我跟vocal.
其他都跟前面一样 不多说了

02:24:993 (7,8,9) - 这边也是违和感 7带掉了红线的重音和wo的起音 8带掉了钢琴的音 Fixed in another way.
02:42:255 (2,3,4,5,6) - 同前面一样 我搞不懂你这么下的原因

02:58:440 (1) - i是轻的ma是重且长音 为什么要带掉

wmfchris wrote:

[general]
Tag vocaloid? :3 It can't be searched via "vocaloid" Fixed
close countdown in [Dis] Fixed
Why naming the diff [KPY] in your own map? xD Because disoy use dis as his diff's name,so I use kpy to comsistent.

[timing]
02:53 - You moved the beat 4 ms backward with a red line... try to move all notes before 02:53 4 ms backward and delete that red timing line?
More uncertainty about the later red line, try to find some timing expert for it? woll be checked by other one.

[KPY]
00:20:584 (1) - remove finish here...? Fixed
00:33:917 (1) - + finish...? Seem bad if I add it.
00:48:914 (4) - [Nazi] up a bit Fixed
00:50:584 (5,6,7) - a (o~o)oo (slider-triplet) rhythm fits with (2,3) better than triplet-slider? X.It's fine now.
00:52:965 (3) - it should be louder than usual? ._. Fixed
01:06:298 (4) - finish as you have done in next next combo? Fixed
01:37:727 (8) - +whistle also to fit the melody X,a clap is more appropriate
01:41:536 (8) - ^ ^
01:48:917 (7,9) - +whistle? Fixed
02:00:584 (6,7) - why only 3 ticks for (6) and 5 ticks for (7) 0.0 X.add a new combo may better.
02:21:298 (4) - remove finish, put a whistle there? Fixed
02:46:156 (4,5,6) - try triplet-slider? and (7,8,9) still feels a bit odd to me orz X.It's fine.

wcx19911123 wrote:

[Relaxing]
00:36:779 (3) - voice down ? Fixed
01:33:921 (1,1) - too far Fixed

1. Creator's Words
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょか？
   ↓
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょうか？
   
2. Tags
   Add "KiritanP" to Dis's one.

1. 00:14:874 (2) - How about changing it like this?
   
2. 02:24:874 (4) - ^

1. 00:15:826 (4,5) - I know you put them following chorus. However I think that players can't hear the chorus while playing so I recommend you to put it following piano.
   
2. 00:52:017 (5) - Add whistle at start of slider?
3. 00:59:636 (1) - Remove whistle?

1. 00:05:112 (x) - Add a note.
2. 01:21:064 (4) - How about this pattern to follow vocal?
   
3. 01:35:945 (x) - Add a note and stack (3) and it with 01:36:064 (4)?
   
4. 01:51:540 (6) - New combo?
5. 03:19:714 (6) - lol variable BPM? It's hard to hit but it's playable imo

Suzully wrote:

[General]

1. Creator's Words
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょか？
   ↓
   10年後の私へ 今は幸せでしょうか？ Fixed
   
2. Tags
   Add "KiritanP" to Dis's one. Fixed

[Relaxing]

1. 00:14:874 (2) - How about changing it like this?
   Fixed
2. 02:24:874 (4) - ^ X.not here sorry.

[KPY]

1. 00:05:112 (x) - Add a note. Fixed
2. 01:21:064 (4) - How about this pattern to follow vocal? X.I think it's okey here.
   [attachment=2:26ffc]screenshot133.jpg[/attachment:26ffc]
3. 01:35:945 (x) - Add a note and stack (3) and it with 01:36:064 (4)? X,orz..no.
   [attachment=1:26ffc]screenshot134.jpg[/attachment:26ffc]
4. 01:51:540 (6) - New combo? Fixed
5. 03:19:714 (6) - lol variable BPM? It's hard to hit but it's playable imo I have to do that due to offset changed T_T