Elfen Lied - Lilium · forum

Yuukari-Banteki

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Yuukari-Banteki 2008-10-25T03:07:20+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Wednesday, February 25, 2009 at 10:42:58 PM

Artist: Elfen Lied
Title: Lilium
BPM: 112
Filesize: 7254kb
Play Time: 01:21
Difficulties Available:

Easy (0.99 stars, 68 notes)
Hard (4.46 stars, 355 notes)
Normal (2.67 stars, 195 notes)

Download: Elfen Lied - Lilium
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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I think the timing is off here. Will add [Hard] later.

Map uploaded on request of Todesengal.

Edit: Hard added~

Edit: Kas's edits

Edit: retimed with awps timing

Edit: Hard spaced to a T

Edit: respaced, added bg

Edit: resnapped all diffs

Edit: Hard is now respaced to 1.2x and difficulty increased

Edit: YAY HITSOUNDS!

Edit: garlic's revisions + pretty colors

Edit: mattys revisions

Edit: LH's edits + symmetrical lily slider

Edit: Rolled's edits

Last edited by Yuukari-Banteki 2009-02-26T04:41:28+00:00, edited 17 times in total.

An64fan

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An64fan 2008-10-25T04:42:03+00:00

You are my GOD, SFG.

I can't remember who the author for this is.... I'm gonna ask a friend who knows and get back to you if someone else doesn't first.

Indeed, timing seems a bit off on parts. I'll give what I can though.

Easy
00:09:86 (4,5,6,7) - These feel and sound better when moved back 1/4 beat.
00:11:99 (1) - This also sounds better 1/4 back.
00:12:52 (2) - Um. I can't tell what this is mapped to. :3 I THINK it's the piano, though it's just so subtle.
00:21:07 (3,4,5) - Try 1/4 back.
00:40:42 (2,3) - Again.
00:43:62 (2) - Back 1/8.
00:44:16 (3,4,5,6,7) - Back 1/4.
00:49:50 (1,2,3) - Back 1/4.
00:56:44 (6,7) - Back 1/4.
01:02:84 (1,2) - Back 1/4.
01:06:05 (5) - Back 1/8.
01:07:65 (2) - Again.
01:42:75 (1) - Back 1/4. Just feels more natural starting there.
01:47:56 (2,3) - Again.
02:18:66 (1,1,1) - Back 1/4.

Stuff besides that being checking spacing again and stuff... I'll come back to normal later, though it felt like a lot of the beats weren't mapped to anything, or at least they were mapped to something incredibly subtle in the background... At least I find these changes make the timing all feel less awkward. =3

silasw

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silasw 2008-11-03T00:33:28+00:00

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Kasada

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Kasada 2008-11-08T03:47:09+00:00

Nice song, and nice map. Just some things to look at...

Hard: 00:05:10 - Decrease length by a 16th.
00:12:04 - Move back a 16th then readjust the length.
00:22:31 - Needs to be closer to 9.
00:28:45 - Not sure how to describe this. Look at this screenshot for my suggested pattern (Ignore the placement, just look at the timeline.) http://up.ppy.sh/files/liliumfix.png

Some of the combos get really high, so you might want to consider adding some more new combo starts. Also, really go back and look at some of your 16th streams. They need to be respaced most of the time.

Normal: Take a look at your eighth note hit patterns. The spacing is REALLY inconsistent.

Easy: 00:03:98 (2),(3),(4) - Move all of these a 16th forward.
00:09:32 - Needs to be farther away from 2.
00:41:49 - Move back a 16th.
00:42:42-00:48:83 - Move all these back a 16th.
01:02:71 - 1 and 2 need to be moved back a 16th.

Now for Easy, I think it would be appropriate to end the map at 01:24:20, but it's totally your call. Just making a suggestion.

01:42:75 - Move 1, 2, and 3 back a 16th.
02:09:45 - 5, 6, 7, and 8 have some funky spacing. Needs to be farther away from each other.
02:18:65 - 1, 1, and 1 need to be moved back a 16th.

And that's it. For what's done, great job. Keep it up.

awp

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awp 2008-11-11T22:53:01+00:00

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iOwnage

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iOwnage 2009-01-03T04:40:55+00:00

Tune up the slider rate under timing for your hard difficulty, then re snap. all your sliders will be much faster resulting much shorter, so after you will have to elongate all of your sliders on hard.

Zodiark1020

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Zodiark1020 2009-02-02T03:15:13+00:00

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Zodiark1020

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Zodiark1020 2009-02-04T13:25:26+00:00

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Wizard Of Orz

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Wizard Of Orz 2009-02-04T23:56:38+00:00

Easy:
00:11:922 (1) too far from 7

Normal:
00:03:351 (3) its too close to 4
01:14:601 line these sliders up
02:20:103 (1) too far from the red slider

Hard:
01:14:601 line these sliders up
02:50:103 is this slider a horn?

good job

nothing really wrong with this map to me
add custon combo

Yuukari-Banteki

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Yuukari-Banteki 2009-02-05T02:17:23+00:00

supergarlic wrote:
Normal:
01:14:601 line these sliders up

I was requested to unstack them because it was too confusing for mappers. I've snapped it now, so its still not on top of each other but they're more distinct.

supergarlic wrote:
Hard:
01:14:601 line these sliders up
02:50:103 is this slider a horn?

good job

nothing really wrong with this map to me
add custon combo

Did the same thing to these sliders. The "horn" slider is supposed to be a lily, which is why it's green. What do you mean by custom combo? A skin?

mattyu007

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mattyu007 2009-02-10T02:31:10+00:00

Timing
Sounds really iffy to me at some parts, but I couldn't really time this much better so... :/

Hard
01:24:51 - Re-place this break
02:14:07 - ^

Normal
02:03:22 - Re-place this break

Easy
01:11:65 - Add a break

The map if pretty ok to me, just make sure you re-place the breaks when you change the timing

EDIT: Oops forgot to star

LuigiHann

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LuigiHann 2009-02-24T03:12:42+00:00

Overall:
I think you might be using the Finish sound too often. The Soft Whistle sound is prettier :p
Your bow-shaped sliders each seem to be unique and kind of asymmetrical. If that's intended to give it character then I guess you can leave them as-is, but it might be better if you made a nice polished one, then copied and pasted it.

Easy:
Pretty good. No real problems.

Normal:
01:45:81 (6) - this slider is tough to read at first glance.
02:18:49 (1,1,1) - I like this.

Hard:
I don't think this song has a solid enough rhythm to justify so much use of triple-beats. It might be okay to use them very sparingly in the high points of the song, but I don't think they fit in well, especially at the beginning.
00:11:92 (1) - End this 1/4 beat earlier?
01:45:81 (3) - Might be okay since this is basically a "hold" slider, but it's still pretty hard to tell which way it's going to go.
02:27:33 (1,1) - Rankability issues aside, there is absolutely nothing in the audio track that justifies these spinners.

I say keep tweaking it. You've done a pretty nice job considering the mellow and uh... opera-y nature of the song.

Rolled

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Rolled 2009-02-26T04:41:28+00:00

Timing is pretty weird. At the least, add 10 ms to the second section (89,756)

Hard:
01:10:04 (1,1,1) - Kill them with fire.
01:21:02 (1) - This is pretty ^__^

Easy:
I played Hard, normal, then easy in that order. It took me until this difficulty to realize the pink chick in the background was not holding a DS.

Fix gay spinners in hard and +10 second offset, then since I don't expect anybody to time this song better than awp did I will bubble.

LuigiHann

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LuigiHann 2009-02-28T04:15:36+00:00

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foulcoon

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foulcoon 2009-02-28T04:27:52+00:00

Hi timing issue fixed cuz i suck.