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Hi! First off: This map looks to be fairly well done so far. Congrats on submitting a polished map to Pending. Now for the constructive criticism part:
Beginner:
00:25:45 (3) - This seemed to be just a little outside of d-snapped. You may want to consider turning off the grid snap for those odd combos.
00:46:97 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - These 3 combos seem unwieldy and a bit strange when first played. You might consider changing the timing of them, if possible.
01:25:86 (1,2,3) - The spacing on these jumps out at the player from the mild spacing of the rest of the difficulty, and is a definite trap. This is possibly the most egregious error on Beginner.
Hard:
00:41:59 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4) - The hitmarkers from the earlier beats in this string completely block out the newly-appearing beats in the same string.
00:56:90 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The spacing on these is a trap as well; This would be justified on Insane, but on Hard this is just a little too much.
01:00:21 (2,3) - Obscuring the repeat mark on the end of a short slider is a nasty trick to pull, indeed.
01:12:42 (7,1) - This jump is possibly a little nasty even for a 4.5 star map.
01:22:97 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Same as with 00:41:59.
01:51:73 (10,11,1,2) - This arrangement could catch a new player by surprise.
Unfortunately, I don't feel like I can properly mod an Insane difficulty, so I'll be stopping here. Also there's probably a few things I missed that a mod of greater skill would easily pick up on; However, I feel like fixing those will get ya closer to rankable.
Beginner:
00:25:45 (3) - This seemed to be just a little outside of d-snapped. You may want to consider turning off the grid snap for those odd combos.
00:46:97 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - These 3 combos seem unwieldy and a bit strange when first played. You might consider changing the timing of them, if possible.
01:25:86 (1,2,3) - The spacing on these jumps out at the player from the mild spacing of the rest of the difficulty, and is a definite trap. This is possibly the most egregious error on Beginner.
Hard:
00:41:59 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4) - The hitmarkers from the earlier beats in this string completely block out the newly-appearing beats in the same string.
00:56:90 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The spacing on these is a trap as well; This would be justified on Insane, but on Hard this is just a little too much.
01:00:21 (2,3) - Obscuring the repeat mark on the end of a short slider is a nasty trick to pull, indeed.
01:12:42 (7,1) - This jump is possibly a little nasty even for a 4.5 star map.
01:22:97 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Same as with 00:41:59.
01:51:73 (10,11,1,2) - This arrangement could catch a new player by surprise.
Unfortunately, I don't feel like I can properly mod an Insane difficulty, so I'll be stopping here. Also there's probably a few things I missed that a mod of greater skill would easily pick up on; However, I feel like fixing those will get ya closer to rankable.
Hey there. 
This is a really good map for a first time! I'm surprised to see how much you know already in beatmapping. The map kinda grows on you as well after modding, haha.
[Easy]:
00:31:24 (2,3) - Very minor complaint. The overlap here doesn't look too pretty. Perhaps you can move (2) so it'll be right of (1) and north of (3)?
00:44:48 (2,3) - Same complaint, but maybe you can flip the (3) here.
01:11:38 (4) - - This time I'm NOT complaining about the overlap. This slider ends at somewhere REALLY strange.
[Hard]:
00:55:86 (6,7) - Move this 1 down on Grid Level 1.
01:18:21 (4,5) - Move 1 right on Grid level 3. (Nazi)
02:06:00 (10) - New combo? (Optional)
02:16:35 (1) - This note is too far away from slider (10)'s endpoint. Put it closer. :3
02:23:59 (3,4) - Move 1 up on Grid Level 3. (If you didn't do this for 1:18:21, don't do it here. If you did, then please do it here as well)
02:28:35 (2,3,4) - Move 1 down and 1 left on Grid Level 2.
[Insane]:
00:24:62 (7) - Move 1 up on Grid Level 3.
01:06:21 (1,2) - There's nothing really cool about these beats. They're really close together and seem desolate. Space them out and make it be like the other notes around it, haha.
01:19:45 (1,2) - Same as above (Except less desolate).
01:43:24 (5) - Move 1 down on Grid Level 3.
02:22:55 (1) - This is inconsistent spacing. Can you put it farther away somewhere? :3
02:23:59 (3) - Try moving this a bit to the right on Grid Level 3 with Grid Snap off. (Make it evenly spaced between (2) and (4).
02:31:04 (4) - Hm...2 to the right on Grid Level 3?
03:10:76 (7) - This is more of a complaint on my end, but since the spacing is far out on the rest of the notes, people can assume this would be a 1/4. Can you space this out a little more?
03:29:79 (3) - If you moved 2:31, move this 2 to the right on Grid Level 3 as well.
Have a star.
This is a really good map for a first time! I'm surprised to see how much you know already in beatmapping. The map kinda grows on you as well after modding, haha.[Easy]:
00:31:24 (2,3) - Very minor complaint. The overlap here doesn't look too pretty. Perhaps you can move (2) so it'll be right of (1) and north of (3)?
00:44:48 (2,3) - Same complaint, but maybe you can flip the (3) here.
01:11:38 (4) - - This time I'm NOT complaining about the overlap. This slider ends at somewhere REALLY strange.
[Hard]:
00:55:86 (6,7) - Move this 1 down on Grid Level 1.
01:18:21 (4,5) - Move 1 right on Grid level 3. (Nazi)
02:06:00 (10) - New combo? (Optional)
02:16:35 (1) - This note is too far away from slider (10)'s endpoint. Put it closer. :3
02:23:59 (3,4) - Move 1 up on Grid Level 3. (If you didn't do this for 1:18:21, don't do it here. If you did, then please do it here as well)
02:28:35 (2,3,4) - Move 1 down and 1 left on Grid Level 2.
[Insane]:
00:24:62 (7) - Move 1 up on Grid Level 3.
01:06:21 (1,2) - There's nothing really cool about these beats. They're really close together and seem desolate. Space them out and make it be like the other notes around it, haha.
01:19:45 (1,2) - Same as above (Except less desolate).
01:43:24 (5) - Move 1 down on Grid Level 3.
02:22:55 (1) - This is inconsistent spacing. Can you put it farther away somewhere? :3
02:23:59 (3) - Try moving this a bit to the right on Grid Level 3 with Grid Snap off. (Make it evenly spaced between (2) and (4).
02:31:04 (4) - Hm...2 to the right on Grid Level 3?
03:10:76 (7) - This is more of a complaint on my end, but since the spacing is far out on the rest of the notes, people can assume this would be a 1/4. Can you space this out a little more?
03:29:79 (3) - If you moved 2:31, move this 2 to the right on Grid Level 3 as well.
Have a star.
Topic Starter
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[Beginner]
01:18:42 (5,6) - space this to (3,4)
soo, yeah, this diff was a tad boring for me at the beginning, just mapping every two beats, but whatever, it picked up at the end though, began to speed up so it's just fine.
[Hard]
00:33:93 (8) - New Combo, cause it starts pretty late, maybe you can put a break or spinner at that paused time (00:32:282 - 00:33:730). Unless it was an INTENTIONAL HP DRAIN xD, then you can keep it, just put new combo and no spinner or break. . . . hope that makes sense.
01:26:69 (1) - not allowed, look at the last mod in insane and you'll find out
this diff was pretty cool
[Insane]
00:37:66 (6,7) - one level 3 grid to the right, so (6) will be aligned with (5) and (7) will be aligned with (8)
00:39:73 (11,12) - this is not allowed move away from under slider plz
01:15:73 (3) - just the same as 00:37:66, move this out from under the slider, not sure about this one though, since there's another note first ??? just fix if you can
02:06:21 (5) - uh-oh, this is surely not allowed, or else, I'm pretty sure, slider is hidden
02:22:97 (2) - space this correctly, I missed here since it is too early
02:39:937 - this break is very long, not a problem, just, it's pretty long, letting you know ;D
03:17:17 (1) - same here, not allowed, spinner is exactly on note, you can't do that, it won't be too hard to just move it to the next blue tick and end the same place, right?
so was this one, cool map, I liked when you sped up to 1/4 stacks and alternating between 1/4 and 1/2 (i.e. 00:46:558 - 00:56:178) those were fun
I'd like to agree with Starrod, this was very good and fun for a first time mapper *starred*
01:18:42 (5,6) - space this to (3,4)
soo, yeah, this diff was a tad boring for me at the beginning, just mapping every two beats, but whatever, it picked up at the end though, began to speed up so it's just fine.
[Hard]
00:33:93 (8) - New Combo, cause it starts pretty late, maybe you can put a break or spinner at that paused time (00:32:282 - 00:33:730). Unless it was an INTENTIONAL HP DRAIN xD, then you can keep it, just put new combo and no spinner or break. . . . hope that makes sense.
01:26:69 (1) - not allowed, look at the last mod in insane and you'll find out
this diff was pretty cool
[Insane]
00:37:66 (6,7) - one level 3 grid to the right, so (6) will be aligned with (5) and (7) will be aligned with (8)
00:39:73 (11,12) - this is not allowed move away from under slider plz
01:15:73 (3) - just the same as 00:37:66, move this out from under the slider, not sure about this one though, since there's another note first ??? just fix if you can
02:06:21 (5) - uh-oh, this is surely not allowed, or else, I'm pretty sure, slider is hidden
02:22:97 (2) - space this correctly, I missed here since it is too early
02:39:937 - this break is very long, not a problem, just, it's pretty long, letting you know ;D
03:17:17 (1) - same here, not allowed, spinner is exactly on note, you can't do that, it won't be too hard to just move it to the next blue tick and end the same place, right?
so was this one, cool map, I liked when you sped up to 1/4 stacks and alternating between 1/4 and 1/2 (i.e. 00:46:558 - 00:56:178) those were fun
I'd like to agree with Starrod, this was very good and fun for a first time mapper *starred*
Topic Starter
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Yeah...makes me wish I can read/write Thai. 
I can only speak it (And not great too)...
Great work on this once more.
I can only speak it (And not great too)...Great work on this once more.
it's a good one beatmap
[Beginner]
- no more sugguestion
[Hard]
- 00:46:971 to 00:56:282: should add more circles same as [Beginner]
- 02:15:523 (3): should begin at 02:15:937 (end at 02:16:144) and add 'clap' sound (at begin only)
- add circle with 'clap' sound at 02:25:040 and 02:32:489
if you do correctly, you'll hear continued 'clap' sound until end
[Insane] too easy to FC for 9m score beatmap
- should reduce the circle size
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I try to using English as much as I can
ก็พยายามใช้ภาษาอังกฤษแล้วนะครับ ไม่รู้จะเข้าใจหรือเปล่า
[Beginner]
- no more sugguestion
[Hard]
- 00:46:971 to 00:56:282: should add more circles same as [Beginner]
- 02:15:523 (3): should begin at 02:15:937 (end at 02:16:144) and add 'clap' sound (at begin only)
- add circle with 'clap' sound at 02:25:040 and 02:32:489
if you do correctly, you'll hear continued 'clap' sound until end
[Insane] too easy to FC for 9m score beatmap
- should reduce the circle size
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I try to using English as much as I can
ก็พยายามใช้ภาษาอังกฤษแล้วนะครับ ไม่รู้จะเข้าใจหรือเปล่า
Topic Starter
I have done on hard follow your suggustion, but not upload yet. Thank you.safe_osu wrote:
it's a good one beatmap
[Beginner]
- no more sugguestion
[Hard]
- 00:46:971 to 00:56:282: should add more circles same as [Beginner]
- 02:15:523 (3): should begin at 02:15:937 (end at 02:16:144) and add 'clap' sound (at begin only)
- add circle with 'clap' sound at 02:25:040 and 02:32:489
if you do correctly, you'll hear continued 'clap' sound until end
[Insane] too easy to FC for 9m score beatmap
- should reduce the circle size
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I try to using English as much as I can
ก็พยายามใช้ภาษาอังกฤษแล้วนะครับ ไม่รู้จะเข้าใจหรือเปล่า
But insane issue I won't do it now. I will looking for another suggestion about it.
TH-Translate
ผมทำบน Hard แล้วครับทั้ง2ตัว แต่ยังไม่ได้อัพโหลด ยังไงก็ขอบคุณครับ
แต่ Insane ผมคิดว่ายังไม่ทำตอนนี้ และจะรอความเห็นอื่นเกี่ยวกับเรื่องนี้นะครับ
IMO, rename Hard => Normal & Insane => Hard
~Beginner~
No comment...
~Hard~
01:26:695 - (S)
Move spinner on blue tick.
~Insane~
- Countdown is useless.
01:22:971 - (7)
01:56:489 - (8)
02:01:454 - (11)
03:22:971 - (7)
Add new combo.
03:52:971 - (1)
Move the ending point closer to (2).
+Star
~Beginner~
No comment...
~Hard~
01:26:695 - (S)
Move spinner on blue tick.
~Insane~
- Countdown is useless.
01:22:971 - (7)
01:56:489 - (8)
02:01:454 - (11)
03:22:971 - (7)
Add new combo.
03:52:971 - (1)
Move the ending point closer to (2).
+Star
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Topic Starter
I'm too lazy too talk in Eng. Please forgive me.= ="
ขอโทษด้วยนะครับที่ไม่สามารถทำตามคำแนะนำได้
คือไม่เห็นด้วยกับตัวแดงหน่อยๆนะครับ พอย้ายโน้ทแล้วมันยังไงไม่รู้ = ="Kharl wrote:
= Insane =
0:40:558 (1,2,3,4)
With (1,2,3) blocking the view like that, hardly anyone would be able to see that (4) is a slider. Either move (1,2,3) or (4) so that they won't overlap with each other.
มี (1,2,3) บังแบบนี้น้อยคนครับที่จะดูออกว่า (4) เป็น slider ย้าย (1,2,3) ไม่ก็ (4) ออก อย่าให้บังกันครับ
1:23:385 (2)
Move it a bit to the left.
1:55:868 (6)
Move it 1/4 beat forward.
2:18:420 (8)
Move it 1/4 beat forward.
ขอโทษด้วยนะครับที่ไม่สามารถทำตามคำแนะนำได้
Topic Starter
Wow! Thank you, mtmcl. xD
เปิดไฟล์ .osu ด้วย NotePad แล้วแก้ตามข้อมูลข้างล่างเลยครับ
[General]
AudioLeadIn: ใน illuminist MiX แก้เป็น 2373 ส่วนอีก 2 ระดับ แก้เป็น 0
PreviewTime: แก้จาก -1 เป็น 59799 ทั้ง 3 ระดับ
Countdown: ใน illuminist MiX แก้เป็น 0 ส่วนอีก 2 ระดับจะ 0 หรือ 1 ก็ได้ ถ้าต้องการให้มีนับ 3 2 1 GO! ก็ใส่ 1
[Metadata]
Source:Kurenai
Tags:anime crossing days shintani ryouko kurenai
illuminist MiX:
- 1. 02:27:73 (7) - New combo.
2. 03:33:93 (8) - ^
3. 03:53:17 (2) - Add a finish at the start of the slider.
- Flawless.
- 1. 00:46:97 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 2 level 3 grids right.
2. 00:53:59 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 2 level 3 grids down.
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+star 
hi i mapped this song too
http://osu.ppy.sh/s/7004
but im too late...
can i join your map?adjasted with your mp3
Download: Shintani Ryouko - Crossing Days (illuminist) [qweqqwweerr Mix].osu
and 紅(Kurenai,boy's name) means this colorRGB(208, 19, 69)
紫(Murasaki,girl's name) means this colorRGB(167, 87, 168),called purple in English
to use these two colors is better
http://osu.ppy.sh/s/7004
but im too late...
can i join your map?adjasted with your mp3
Download: Shintani Ryouko - Crossing Days (illuminist) [qweqqwweerr Mix].osu
and 紅(Kurenai,boy's name) means this colorRGB(208, 19, 69)
紫(Murasaki,girl's name) means this colorRGB(167, 87, 168),called purple in English
to use these two colors is better