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1. 00:24:254 (2,3,4) - I know that u used a lot of these short 1/4 sliders, but in that quiet part u should stay with normal 1/2 circles.
2. 00:52:689 (5,6) - Stay with 1,0x DS? I dont hear any music changes, so better to keep 1,0x
3. 00:53:507 - add note? I know u were aiming for vocal, but u can do it when vocal starts (thats why i understand no circle at 00:54:598)
4. 00:58:144 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - love that part ;3 But u can make it more interesting by adding 1 more slider and 1 circle, better flow and vocal accent, look: http://puu.sh/49e30.jpg
5. 01:09:781 (4,5,6) - U should stay with 1,5x DS, music is getting more intense and u are lowering DS to 1,0x...
6. 01:12:089 (6,7,8) - ^
7. 01:30:453 (5,6,7,8) - Here guitar sounds different and its ideal moment to change flow (i mean make DS higher), look (u dont have to copy my note placement) http://puu.sh/49ew9.jpg
8. 01:34:445 (1,2,3) - not sure about this, it can dissapoint player because u used a lot of 1/4 triplets, up to u
9. 01:40:067 (16) - end stream with 1/2 slider?
10. 01:47:829 (5,6,7,8) - guitar changes, so maybe change flow? http://puu.sh/49eKr.jpg up to u
11. 01:55:429 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - hmm nice stream, but in my opinion it will look more interesting if circle number 6 will be 1/4 reverse slider (only 1 reverse!!!)
12. 02:04:651 (5,6,7,8,9) - again guitar changes = change DS, example: http://puu.sh/49f10.jpg more interesting in my opinion
13. 02:37:612 (5,6,7,8) - again...
14. 02:45:926 (1,2,3,4) - DS 1,5x?
15. 03:02:574 (13) - Bigger jump between stream and slider?

1. 00:39:821 (3) - http://puu.sh/49fqr.jpg ?
2. 00:57:053 (3) - http://puu.sh/49fyB.jpg ?
3. 00:58:951 (3) - http://puu.sh/49fAt.jpg ?
4. 01:06:938 - add circle here, music is more intense
5. 01:07:458 (2) - http://puu.sh/49fGb.jpg ?
6. 02:17:840 - u should start using here 1/2 tick, using 1/1 tick throught that whole section is boring.
7. 03:01:074 (2) - maybe reverse slider 1/4 stream instead of that long slider? its end of music so we can use something more interesting
   
   Overall sugestion, use more reverse sliders instead of long single sliders, even 1/4 reverse slider can be good here because its only 100-120 bpm.

Tidek wrote:

Advanced

1. 00:24:254 (2,3,4) - I know that u used a lot of these short 1/4 sliders, but in that quiet part u should stay with normal 1/2 circles.
   yes, maybe but i can speed up things following lyrics here, prefer to leave this as it is
2. 00:52:689 (5,6) - Stay with 1,0x DS? I dont hear any music changes, so better to keep 1,0x
   nothing big wrong here DS change is not huge and this one made to switch flow and works quite good
3. 00:53:507 - add note? I know u were aiming for vocal, but u can do it when vocal starts (thats why i understand no circle at 00:54:598)
   yes, i should think more about this one
4. 00:58:144 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - love that part ;3 But u can make it more interesting by adding 1 more slider and 1 circle, better flow and vocal accent, look: http://puu.sh/49e30.jpg
   additional 1\4 looks good too but i prefer 2\1 finishes way here
5. 01:09:781 (4,5,6) - U should stay with 1,5x DS, music is getting more intense and u are lowering DS to 1,0x...
   yep, right, expanded to 1.2
6. 01:12:089 (6,7,8) - ^
   1.2 here
7. 01:30:453 (5,6,7,8) - Here guitar sounds different and its ideal moment to change flow (i mean make DS higher), look (u dont have to copy my note placement) http://puu.sh/49ew9.jpg
   i'll consider this but this maybe too confusing to play
8. 01:34:445 (1,2,3) - not sure about this, it can dissapoint player because u used a lot of 1/4 triplets, up to u
   yes, right, changed
9. 01:40:067 (16) - end stream with 1/2 slider?
   don't think this will fit
10. 01:47:829 (5,6,7,8) - guitar changes, so maybe change flow? http://puu.sh/49eKr.jpg up to u
    too confusing
11. 01:55:429 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - hmm nice stream, but in my opinion it will look more interesting if circle number 6 will be 1/4 reverse slider (only 1 reverse!!!)
    don't love such repeats in streams
12. 02:04:651 (5,6,7,8,9) - again guitar changes = change DS, example: http://puu.sh/49f10.jpg more interesting in my opinion
    yep, same, seems way too confusing to me
13. 02:37:612 (5,6,7,8) - again...
    ugu
14. 02:45:926 (1,2,3,4) - DS 1,5x?
    i think 1.0 effect is enough afted compressed stream
15. 03:02:574 (13) - Bigger jump between stream and slider?
    yep, but there is so little rooms for this

Medium

1. 00:39:821 (3) - http://puu.sh/49fqr.jpg ?
2. 00:57:053 (3) - http://puu.sh/49fyB.jpg ?
3. 00:58:951 (3) - http://puu.sh/49fAt.jpg ?
4. 01:06:938 - add circle here, music is more intense
5. 01:07:458 (2) - http://puu.sh/49fGb.jpg ?
6. 02:17:840 - u should start using here 1/2 tick, using 1/1 tick throught that whole section is boring.
7. 03:01:074 (2) - maybe reverse slider 1/4 stream instead of that long slider? its end of music so we can use something more interesting
   
   Overall sugestion, use more reverse sliders instead of long single sliders, even 1/4 reverse slider can be good here because its only 100-120 bpm.
   
   No changes here, mainly because i target this diff as normal, more 1\2 reverses will just harass player and remove variety in rhythm. :\
   thanks for suggestions anyway :3

TrigonometrY wrote:

[General]
В Medium и Beginner Widescreen Support включён, в Advanced - нет, так задумано?
это что-то новое фиксед

[Advanced]
01:01:238 - зачем здесь Inherited Point?
незачем конечно :3
02:22:388 - ^
^
00:53:507 - здесь напрашивается нота с финишем. На предыдущих моментах она есть, а здесь словно чего-то не хватает
ага, надо подумать насчет нее, вроде оно и неплохо вписывается, а вроде и пропуск тут дает свой эффект, подумаю
00:57:871 - тоже. Вот он поёт "Do you love me" - на Do есть круг, на you её тоже хочется выбить. Даже если ты не по вокалу маппишь, то под гитару тоже бы подошло
тут мне надо посильнее финиш выделить на 00:58:144 (1) - это лучше таким пробелом сделать
01:34:445 (1,2,3) - киаи, интенсивная музыка и антиджампы? Немного неудобно играется, антиджампы неожиданны. Может, сделаешь эти три ноты с обычным спейсингом?
да, абсолютно верно
01:46:762 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - вот здесь две ноты+джамп классно смотрятся и подходят под музыку, а 01:45:960 (1,2,3) - эти, опять же, озадачивают
и джампы там не в тему будут, не знаю, пока оставлю как есть
02:18:851 (5) - здесь слышатся два чётких удара, ничего протяжного. Может, заменить двумя кругами? И один под другим, чтобы с этими сочетались 02:19:356 (6,7) -
идея хороша, только джамп с 1\4 слайдера будет большеват для момента, подумаю что можно сделать
02:19:861 (1) - ^
и тут
02:57:569 (1,2,3) - антиджааампы :<
теперь джампы :3

[Medium]
02:37:612 (3) - три подряд финиша эффектнее выбиваются кругами, почему бы не заменить этот слайдер ими? 02:36:853 - нужно ли упускать эту ноту? 02:36:600 (1,2,3,4,5) - звучит примерно как "туду-туду-тудудудуду" В общем, предлагаю такой ритм:
не хочу усложнять для нормала, 4 круга подряд :\

[Beginner]
00:58:682 (2) - аа почему ревёрс на красном тике? Звучит странно, да и на изи такая смена ритма удивляет. Может, подвинуть его на белый левый тик? Абсолютно подойдёт по музыку же. 01:00:296 - а сюда круг тогда.
да
01:09:268 (3) - аналогично
а здесь вроде получше звучит

Stefan wrote:

Take the Stars on your way. :3

-Bakari- wrote:

[General]

1. You don't even have a storyboard. There's no point in keeping Widescreen support enabled! Disable it!
   is this related only to storyboard?
2. Rock will be used as a ganre. There's no need to keep it in tags / Add Harmonies to tags, part of the album's name! confirmation
   rock stays for a while and album name imperfect remixes

[Beginner]

1. Try to reduce all diff settings except CS by one or even two ticks! THis is a [Beginner] diff! Keep it easy!
   sure
2. If it's possible, remove all unused green lines. They make no sense and may confuse some modders!
   nah, they doesn't hurt anybody
3. 01:17:986 (2,3) - nazi - both you and I nkow that you can mae this blanket MUCH better! So, go ahead and change it!
   tuned a little
4. 01:42:210 (3,4) - nazi - flow between (3) and (4) doesn't look good.If you re-arrange you patterns a bit, you'll be able to create an interesting flow here! example!
   eh, current way works fine i think
5. 02:01:466 (1) - that's a cute slider! Try to avoid overlap between head/tail to make this slider even more readable for beginners!
   i cant ;_;
6. 03:06:866 (1) - just follow strong beats and finish your slider on 03:08:381. So, players will have more time to prepare for the spinner or recover.
   they don't need to recover here, spinner 5 sec long and red one beat is stronger here, so no change
   
   Awesome diff. Diff settings bug me a lot, but rhythm and patterns are really nice!

[Medium]

1. 01:13:364 (1,2,3) - sounds a bit off. A specially (3) it hits almost nothing in music. Try to replace (1) with a circle and nudge 01:13:618 (2,3) - to the previous red tick. It may look strange, but it actually fits better! uguu
   consider on that
2. 02:01:466 (1) - this is awesome.
3. 02:22:388 (2,1) - swap new combos here to emphasize vocals. It will reflect vocals much better!
   alright
4. 02:54:808 (1,2) - nazi - oh, c'mon, there's only ONE overlap in the whole diff. IT doesn't looks neat here, try to avoid it :<
   :< not so bad overlap

[Advanced]
Blargh, you named it Advanced. k

1. 01:00:296 (9) - replace it with 1/4 slider+repeat. It'll make flow smoother + it sounds awesome!
   intended, but I'll think about this again
2. 01:46:762 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - nazi - Reduce the DS to make it look like stacks.Antijumps won't fit here.
   hm, but i find them funny actually

11t wrote:

[General]

Great skin! It matches the background very well.

[Advanced]

01:00:296 (9,1) - Consider adding something here to fill the gap, as the spacing implies that these are 1/2 beats apart, and not a full beat apart. Maybe change 9 into a 1/2 beat slider? Or add another hitcircle at 01:00:565.
finish-finish requires 1\1 beat here and i don't want to change finish-finish thing here, so :3

02:23:398 (2,3,4,5,6) - I feel sort of bad for even considering to point this out, but this arrangement isn't symmetrical. 6 needs to be moved slightly to the left, or you could just convert slider to stream this part to be absolutely sure, if you care enough.
yep but not supposed to be

02:25:428 (2,3,4,5,6) - And if you do care enough, here's another one where 6 is off by a bit.

03:04:845 (1,2,3,4,5) - This doesn't follow a smooth curve. Either make it a smooth curve or make it different enough so that it won't be mistaken for an attempt at a smooth curve.
tuned a bit

You've made some really interesting aesthetic choices in this map. Normally I'd be upset with things like 01:55:029 (5,1,2) but I think they suit the style of your map just fine. That being said, the angle formed at 01:55:962 (5,6,7) doesn't particularly match the rest of the stream. Consider moving 7 and the rest of the stream slightly to the left.

The way you've changed direction there midstream to match the percussion is genius, by the way.

[Medium]

02:01:466 (1) - Okay.
...
okay
i know, i know, nobody likes long sliders, but it is enough notes spam for this section

02:38:625 (1,2) - Why is there such a huge delay here? It's sort of disruptive to the flow in my opinion. To me there's no reason not to map this section with another slider or some hitcircles to match the vocals or percussion.
yes, but this one is intended

02:46:682 (6) - 72,220 might look better for this one.
yes

[Beginner]

01:20:572 (4) - This here is the only spacing issue that you have on the map; at 1.16x, this is the only note that aimod points out. I personally think it's insignificant, doesn't affect play at all, and isn't necessary to change, but it is the only thing that aimod points out...
tuned

01:48:096 (5) - Remove finish? This sounds out-of-place at the moment.
indeed

No other issues here. I think this map is well-suited for a novice osu player. You keep your object patterns consistent and easy to read.

[Closing]

Amazing mapset! Everything flows nicely and suits the rhythms present in the song; I especially liked how you utilized certain elements of the percussion in your streams in Advanced.

Given your style I didn't think you were too concerned about making everything perfectly symmetrical, so I didn't mention some of the more insignificant issues with note placement. Send me a PM if you do want me to give you a full list, however.

Good luck with ranking!