Robin Thicke Feat. T.I. & Pharrell - Blurred Lines · forum

BounceBabe

Joined October 2010

Topic Starter

BounceBabe 2013-08-20T12:10:38+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Dienstag, 3. Dezember 2013 at 00:19:11

Artist: Robin Thicke Feat. T.I. & Pharrell
Title: Blurred Lines
Tags: cut mix -bakari-
BPM: 120
Filesize: 3494kb
Play Time: 02:58
Difficulties Available:

Bakari's Easy (1,46 stars, 147 notes)
Hard (4,6 stars, 371 notes)
Naughty (4,87 stars, 423 notes)
Normal (3,66 stars, 233 notes)

Download: Robin Thicke Feat. T.I. & Pharrell - Blurred Lines
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
---------------
... and that's why imma take a good boy ~ :3
Cut out the shitty rap part, nevertheless i hope you still enjoy it! Made a small SB as well to emphasize the lyrics.

Easy - Done by -Bakari-! Thank you (:
Normal - Done
Hard - Done
Insane - Done
SB - Done

Enjoy!

Changelog
- Added -Bakari- to tags
- Changed an Image
- Added new SB elements
- Changed -Bakari-'s difficultie name to Bakari and fixed tags
- Changed Offset with +20 and deleted an unnecessary Back Up Image from the folder
- Fixed Bakari's difficultie and moved a few elements
- Renamed Insane to "Naughty"

Last edited by BounceBabe 2013-12-02T23:19:37+00:00, edited 23 times in total.

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-08-23T15:46:00+00:00

first o3o

BounceBabe

1,626 posts

Joined October 2010

Topic Starter

BounceBabe 2013-08-24T15:29:05+00:00

~~Just saying; will add tags and change names once i have Lallys difficultie as well n.n/~~

;w;

XinCrin

2,846 posts

Joined January 2012

XinCrin 2013-09-13T00:00:58+00:00

Hello BounceBabe , here you have your mod from this queue

General

For consistency with other diffs. , enable the widescreen support in Insane diff too . (Song Setup>Design)

Bakari's Easy

00:32:161 (3) I love it <3
01:25:161 (4) In my opinion , the flow will improve if you move the second sliderpoint to x:464 y:220 . Something like this :
SPOILER
01:29:661 (4) What about to use only a Finish or a Finish with Sampleset Normal in the end of this slider , since here the music change here again
01:44:286 (Break time) I'm not sure , but sincerely you should map this part . For consistency with other diffs
02:56:161 (Inherited Point) You should decrease the volume from this inherited point to 5% , since the music is decreasing the volumen bit a bit . And here , the music is almost muted

Normal

00:02:161 (1) What about to put a Finish in the beginning of this slider ? , since it's the beginning of the map and it will be sound much better imo
01:06:161 (1) This is a nice slider, but needs more work. Try to do better curvy slider
SPOILER
01:16:661 (2,4) This stack could be a bit hard to read imo . Try to move (4) to x:312 y:296 . It will be much better in my opinion
01:22:286 (Break time) I'm not sure , but sincerely you should map this part . For consistency with other diffs
02:45:411 (3) Put a Clap in the reverse of this slider , for consistency with the rest of the map

Hard

00:05:911 (x) What about to add a circle here ? . Follow perfectly the music and sounds fine imo
00:17:911 (4,5) In my opinion , the flow will be much better if you unstack these objects . You should try it
00:32:161 (6) Put a NC in this slider , since the music and voice changes here perfectly
01:26:161 (1) For a better flow , move the second sliderpoint to x:88 y:224
SPOILER
01:30:161 (1) What about to use a Finish here ? . It will sounds fine with the music imo
02:45:911 (x) What about to add a circle here ? . Follow perfectly the music and sounds fine imo
02:57:911 (4,5) What do you think about to unstack these objects ? . Try moving (5) to x:272 y:264 , the flow will be much better

Good Luck with this map !!

BounceBabe

1,626 posts

Joined October 2010

Topic Starter

BounceBabe 2013-09-13T15:55:01+00:00

XinCrin

XinCrin wrote:

[*] 01:06:161 (1) This is a nice slider, but needs more work. Try to do better curvy slider I wanted it to be slightly curved not fully.
[*]01:22:286 (Break time) I'm not sure , but sincerely you should map this part . For consistency with other diffs I wanted to give a little break for the easier diffs though.

[b]Hard

[list][*]00:05:911 (x) What about to add a circle here ? . Follow perfectly the music and sounds fine imo I'd need to do this then on the following too. If i don't it wouldnt be consistant
[*]01:30:161 (1) What about to use a Finish here ? . It will sounds fine with the music imo Can't agree with this sorry x:
[*]02:45:911 (x) What about to add a circle here ? . Follow perfectly the music and sounds fine imo Same as above

Everything else is fixed, thank you a lot!

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-09-20T12:48:04+00:00

yo o3o/ queue req

[moeri]

01:06:161 (1) - use a soft or normal fnish at the slider start
01:10:661 (1) - you forgot a clap on slider start
01:29:661 (4) - use a clap on slider start
02:04:661 (2) - isnot so cute this overlap because this slider appears when 02:02:161 (1) - this slider is visible so try to improve it to don't confuse the beginners

[Normal]

01:00:161 (1,2,3) - try a pattern like this here : it flows a bit better as your actual one
SPOILER
02:21:161 (3,1) - i think you can improve the flow here with something like:
SPOILER
02:56:161 (1,2,3) - i think a spinner is better here and same for Hard and Insane

[Hard]

use AR 7 and HP and OD 6 :V is better because the jump to Insane thatis AR9 is a bit to big :V if you're not going to change it i highly suggest to use AR8 in the insane diff

[Insane]

02:15:161 (3) - try with something like this here:
SPOILER

o.o nice mapset have not much to say

good luck

BounceBabe

1,626 posts

Joined October 2010

Topic Starter

BounceBabe 2013-09-20T12:58:54+00:00

@Lally: Fixed everything but can't agree with the spinners. Thanks a lot (:

riffy

osu! Alumni

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Joined December 2010

riffy 2013-09-20T13:01:04+00:00

XinCrin wrote:
Bakari's Easy

00:32:161 (3) I love it <3 glad you liked it, wasn't sure about this slider
01:25:161 (4) In my opinion , the flow will improve if you move the second sliderpoint to x:464 y:220 . Something like this : well, I'll consider it, I like the circle-pattern more o3o
SPOILER
01:29:661 (4) What about to use only a Finish or a Finish with Sampleset Normal in the end of this slider , since here the music change here again sure
01:44:286 (Break time) I'm not sure , but sincerely you should map this part . For consistency with other diffs beginners NEED this break, it's too tiring for them!
02:56:161 (Inherited Point) You should decrease the volume from this inherited point to 5% , since the music is decreasing the volumen bit a bit . And here , the music is almost muted sure

Applied everything @ Nyally

code

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: Robin Thicke Feat T.I. & Pharrell - Blurred Lines.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 979
PreviewTime: 48649
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: None
StackLeniency: 0.5
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0
WidescreenStoryboard: 1

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1
BeatDivisor: 2
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:Blurred Lines
TitleUnicode:Blurred Lines
Artist:Robin Thicke Feat. T.I. & Pharrell
ArtistUnicode:Robin Thicke Feat. T.I. & Pharrell
Creator:BounceBabe
Version:Bakari's Easy
Source:
Tags:cut mix
BeatmapID:0
BeatmapSetID:-1

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HPDrainRate:1
CircleSize:3
OverallDifficulty:1
ApproachRate:2
SliderMultiplier:1
SliderTickRate:2

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//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
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Thanks a lot for your mods

Gero

4,438 posts

Joined March 2012

Gero 2013-10-16T22:08:21+00:00

Hi I Forgot to mod this

Sorry

General

Clean

-Bakari-'s Easy

00:04:161 - I think it would be great if you add a note here with NC, really when I test the map felt the sensation of squeezing something here. or maybe something like this:
SPOILER
00:43:661 (2,5) - This slider 00:45:661 (5) - is being covered by this 00:43:661 (2) - would be better if you could change these patterns better, since not it is highly recommended that you have hidden sliders Imo.
02:02:161 (1,2) - ^
00:15:161 - add note here, same reason ^
01:16:161 - ^
00:56:161 - ^
01:18:161 - ^
01:06:161 (1) - add finish on head with addition normal sounds good imo. <-- this is a suggestion you're free to ignore this.

Normal

00:56:661 (1,1) - Nazi* moves this slider to X:152 Y:25 for better stacking.
01:29:661 (4,5,1) - in my opinion it is not recommended to stack notes in this way on a normal difficulty is confusion for newbies.
01:36:161 (1) - many repeats here is confusion ^ can you make another pattern here please, is difficult to read.
01:46:161 - what do you think to add a note here? 01:48:161 - for to maintain consistency in this part. or maybe a slider that starts from here: 01:45:911 - and until here: 01:46:161 .
02:00:661 (1) - This circle is too close to the HP bar, I recommend you move it a little lower
02:21:161 (3) - Same here ^
02:56:161 - can you reduce the volume to 10 %? please is better to hear imo.

Hard

00:27:661 (5) - this slider does not flow very well, as these completely ignoring the voice here, try this:
SPOILER
or maybe with a rhythm similar to what you did here 00:29:411 (3,4).
00:44:161 - ^
00:31:911 - you only need to add a note here because beam marked this part before, it would be bad to ignore now.
00:52:161 (1,2,3,4,5) - Creative <3~
01:22:661 (2,3) - Nazi* ugly blanket I'm sure you can do it better.

Insane

00:02:911 - what do you think of adding three notes here? 00:02:911, 00:03:036, 00:03:161, this follow very good the background.
00:05:161 - ^
00:07:161 - ^
why do you ignoring the beats important? ^
00:19:911 (5) - move this slider to X:303 Y:218 for a better stacking
00:43:661 (4,5) - Nazi* Move this 00:43:911 (5) - to X:35 Y:356 ^
00:22:411 - add note here feels empty without something here.

This is all, I Like it, GL BB~

BounceBabe

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Topic Starter

BounceBabe 2013-10-17T11:44:26+00:00

Gero wrote:
Hi I Forgot to mod this Sorry As I said in chat; better late than never!

Normal

01:36:161 (1) - many repeats here is confusion ^ can you make another pattern here please, is difficult to read. The sliderspeed isn't too fast so it is readable enough.
02:56:161 - can you reduce the volume to 10 %? please is better to hear imo. It is 15, should be fine. 10 is too quiet.

Hard

00:27:661 (5) - this slider does not flow very well, as these completely ignoring the voice here, try this:
SPOILER
Empahsizing and mapping to the vocal. Why is this not fitting to the voice?
00:52:161 (1,2,3,4,5) - Creative <3~ :)
01:22:661 (2,3) - Nazi* ugly blanket I'm sure you can do it better. It's pretty well how it is

Insane

[list][*]00:02:911 - what do you think of adding three notes here? 00:02:911, 00:03:036, 00:03:161, this follow very good the background.
[*]00:05:161 - ^
[*]00:07:161 - ^
why do you ignoring the beats important? ^ It's called a little break between patterns. I made stop and go patterns. Also i tried to emphasize the claps and not the 1/1 beats.

This is all, I Like it, GL BB~

Thanks a lot! Everything else is fixed. (:

riffy

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riffy 2013-10-18T12:41:49+00:00

Gero wrote:
-Bakari-'s Easy
00:04:161 - I think it would be great if you add a note here with NC, really when I test the map felt the sensation of squeezing something here. or maybe something like this:
SPOILER
00:43:661 (2,5) - This slider 00:45:661 (5) - is being covered by this 00:43:661 (2) - would be better if you could change these patterns better, since not it is highly recommended that you have hidden sliders Imo. c'mon, man, those overlaps aren't even visisble. that's ok :<
02:02:161 (1,2) - ^
00:15:161 - add note here, same reason ^ c'mon, i don't feel like it's really needed to map these beats. it feels ok as it is to me, simple and catchable o3o same for EVERY similar suggestion.
01:16:161 - ^
00:56:161 - ^
01:18:161 - ^
01:06:161 (1) - add finish on head with addition normal sounds good imo. <-- this is a suggestion you're free to ignore this. it's up to BB. hitsounds on this diff aren't mine

The diff name is Bakari's Easy / Keeping Bakari (without " - ") is just wrong, please remove that pointless tag.

BounceBabe

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BounceBabe 2013-10-18T13:34:57+00:00

-Bakari- wrote:
The diff name is Bakari's Easy / Keeping Bakari (without " - ") is just wrong, please remove that pointless tag.

But that's your name!

riffy

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riffy 2013-10-18T14:18:00+00:00

We've already discussed it million times with BATs. It MUST be that way, check any of my ranked guest diffs to make sure.

Mushu

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Mushu 2013-10-19T17:34:28+00:00

loved the map but personally i would change the hitsounds to the standard ones. still fun either way.

Suimya

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Suimya 2013-10-23T21:48:58+00:00

here's my mod4mod, Thanks for modding my map :3

Bakari's Easy:

00:07:661 (3) - why not make this slider like this, to avoid the copy/paste o.o
SPOILER
00:15:661 (2) - it'll be really better with next slider, if you moved this one with the last slider tick one grid to the right
00:28:661 (3) - i think it'll make nice effect if you added a nc on this slider, it'll follow the voice better imo~
00:43:661 (2) - try to avoid the overlap since it's easy diff, maybe do something like this?
SPOILER
01:21:161 (4) - it'll be better imo, if you did this slider like this, so the next slider would look nicer o.o
SPOILER
01:25:161 (4) - ^
SPOILER
01:29:161 (3) - I don't think this note looks good atm so, i suggest you to move it 3 grids down so it'll fit with the pattern better
02:02:161 (1,2) - Bakari...why just why? ;w; don't make such overlap in easy diffs ....do something about it!!! and you're a great mapper baka!
02:23:661 (3,1) - ^

Normal:

00:22:161 (1) - not perfectly stucked o.o fix it by disabling the grid snapped and DS
00:39:161 (3) - it'll make better blanket if you move the last slider point at x:124 y:24
00:55:911 (3) - it's flow a bit bad...how about moving this slider like this?
SPOILER
01:36:161 (1) - sudden repeats? o.o it'll be confusing imo, so how about adding one repeat and a note instead?
01:59:911 (3) - same as i said here 00:55:911 (3) -
SPOILER
02:01:161 (2) - ^ if you did the above please do this on the next slider
SPOILER
02:21:161 (3) - how about this?, same suggestion i said earlier
SPOILER

Hard:
HP +1 it'll fit with the spread better o.o
didn't find anything >< good diff overall and i liked it <3

Insane:
suddenly ar9....it's too fast for this song imo, so i suggest you to reduce it with one it'll be better

00:43:911 (5) - the end of this slider is not stucked good
02:23:661 (6) - ctrl+G would make better effect to this slider, it'll make nicer flow to this part

That's all i found..it's great mapset, this should be ranked <3

BounceBabe

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BounceBabe 2013-10-24T11:10:42+00:00

@Sekai-nyan: Changed the Hard and Insane things you suggested! On Normal; the things you suggested ( 00:55:911 (3) ) with the different curving is done on purpose, i wanted to make symmetry patterns (: 01:36:161 (1) - The repeats were done because of the vocal, to emphasize. The slider isn't too fast so it should be clearly visible. Fixed the other things though, thank you for taking time!

riffy

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riffy 2013-10-24T15:11:03+00:00

Sekai-nyan wrote:
here's my mod4mod, Thanks for modding my map :3

Bakari's Easy:
00:07:661 (3) - why not make this slider like this, to avoid the copy/paste o.o copypasta like this is totally okay, it's not so easy to notice it
00:15:661 (2) - it'll be really better with next slider, if you moved this one with the last slider tick one grid to the right k
00:28:661 (3) - i think it'll make nice effect if you added a nc on this slider, it'll follow the voice better imo~ sorry, i don't want to break my comboing. it may confuse some players
00:43:661 (2) - try to avoid the overlap since it's easy diff, maybe do something like this? it's NOT even visible, c'mon!
01:21:161 (4) - it'll be better imo, if you did this slider like this, so the next slider would look nicer o.o why? i think that my flow is better, sorry :<
01:25:161 (4) - ^ ^
01:29:161 (3) - I don't think this note looks good atm so, i suggest you to move it 3 grids down so it'll fit with the pattern better no way! It's a circe-shaped flow, I don't want to change it :<
02:02:161 (1,2) - Bakari...why just why? ;w; don't make such overlap in easy diffs ....do something about it!!! and you're a great mapper baka! give me examples of your better ideas, I can't think of anything better! what's more it looks okay for me :<
02:23:661 (3,1) - ^

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240,288,132661,2,0,P|208:296|140:280,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
336,308,134161,5,0,0:0:0:0:
304,212,134661,2,0,P|336:204|404:220,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
204,192,136161,1,0,0:0:0:0:
120,136,136661,2,0,L|108:36,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
56,212,138161,6,0,P|68:268|280:324,1,300,4|8,0:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
444,228,140661,2,0,L|504:240,2,50,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
396,140,141661,1,8,0:0:0:0:
216,52,142661,5,8,0:0:0:0:
144,120,143161,1,0,0:0:0:0:
196,204,143661,2,0,P|208:256|192:316,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
144,120,145161,2,0,P|100:112|44:128,1,100,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
100,212,146161,6,0,P|216:192|204:36,1,300,4|8,0:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
320,200,148661,2,0,P|364:208|424:184,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
136,116,150661,6,0,P|92:108|32:132,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
220,172,152161,1,0,0:0:0:0:
316,140,152661,2,0,P|344:96|336:32,1,100,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
244,72,153661,1,8,0:0:0:0:
220,172,154161,6,0,P|256:216|432:120,1,300,4|8,0:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
252,40,156661,2,0,P|212:40|148:52,1,100,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
64,92,157661,1,8,0:0:0:0:
112,288,158661,6,0,L|56:284,2,50,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
192,348,159661,1,8,0:0:0:0:
260,276,160161,1,0,0:0:0:0:
356,304,160661,2,0,L|472:308,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
332,208,162161,6,0,P|324:168|344:108,2,100,4|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
356,304,163661,1,8,0:0:0:0:
260,272,164161,2,0,P|208:280|180:88,1,300,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
220,180,166161,5,4,0:0:0:0:
312,136,166661,2,0,L|320:24,2,100,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
388,204,168161,1,4,0:0:0:0:
328,284,168661,2,0,P|300:300|168:220,1,200,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,192,170161,12,0,178161,0:0:0:0:

Thank you!

10crystalmask01

10crystalmask01 2013-10-29T22:57:52+00:00

Ello o3o Mod as requested~

[General]
On all the spots where you've used Normal finish, I think a soft finish sounds better. But that's just imo,
[Bakari's Easy]
01:42:661 (1) - Lower it a bit, since I see this:

Doesn't look really nice

02:04:661 (2) - Really bad overlap, new players won't notice the second slider on time, so I'd suggest you re-map his part a bit.

[Normal]
00:06:161 (1) - Make it a curved slider, and make 00:08:161 (1) - straight so it forms a notice able pattern form o3o (curve-straight-curve....)
00:14:161 (1) - Move to the same coordinates as 00:10:161 (1) - instead,since I dislike seeing how 00:12:161 (1) - 's tail overlaps the slider a bit.
00:46:161 (1) - Move its tail a little under horizontal :S like this?

01:35:911 (4) - Move to 44/284 and 01:36:161 (1) - to 92/320, so its entire flow is curved.
Or you could replace 01:35:661 (3,4) - with a 1/2 slider like this:

02:08:161 - 02:10:161 No kai?
02:32:411 (1) - Try having it's tail angled upwards?

[Hard]
01:25:161 (4) - Just make it a simple curved slider, so it blankets the tail of 01:24:661 (3) - better.

[Insane]
00:49:661 (4,1) - The way these two objects are beside each other doesn't look nice imo :S consider re-modeling
01:54:161 (1) - ^
02:08:161 - 02:10:161 No kai?
02:53:661 (4,5) - Switch spots so it forms that same trick as 02:51:661 (4,5) -

01:34:411 - What rhymes with huge me? O_O Hmm...Oh god, wait NO!
...I'll never be able to un-hear that again

Anyways, hope this helps!

*Aaand this map proves that Normal AR can be 4! >w<

BounceBabe

1,626 posts

Joined October 2010

Topic Starter

BounceBabe 2013-10-30T13:16:33+00:00

10crystalmask01 wrote:
Ello o3o Mod as requested~ ^-^

[General]
On all the spots where you've used Normal finish, I think a soft finish sounds better. But that's just imo, The normal hit finish gives some highlights, so i will keep them (:

[Normal]
00:14:161 (1) - Move to the same coordinates as 00:10:161 (1) - instead,since I dislike seeing how 00:12:161 (1) - 's tail overlaps the slider a bit. I wanted it to blanket with the big curved slider

[Insane]
00:49:661 (4,1) - The way these two objects are beside each other doesn't look nice imo :S consider re-modeling
01:54:161 (1) - ^ Done on purpose. Straight slider - straight slider start (:
02:53:661 (4,5) - Switch spots so it forms that same trick as 02:51:661 (4,5) - It's normal spacing - jump - normal spacing - jump
01:34:411 - What rhymes with huge me? O_O Hmm...Oh god, wait NO! Isn't it what rhymes would hug me? xD
...I'll never be able to un-hear that again

Anyways, hope this helps!

*Aaand this map proves that Normal AR can be 4! >w< Yep !

Thank you very much, fixed the other things (:

TrigonometrY

281 posts

Joined November 2011

TrigonometrY 2013-10-30T20:14:45+00:00

As requested via pm
[General]
Too much kiai. I understand, you put it by following the chorus, but flashing notes for nearly a minute are cruelly for eyes, especially with SB (or maybe it's just me). Suggesting to leave only flashes here 00:50:161 - 01:06:161 - 01:54:161 -
[Insane]
01:14:161 (1) - maybe wave shape will be better fit the calm music?

SPOILER

01:28:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this part stands out, so I propose to use a higher spacing (2.0x, for example):

SPOILER

[Hard]
I was surprised to see slider+2 circles instead of short slider with reverse which you use on Insane. 01:03:911 (6,1,2) -
02:23:911 (7,1,2) - triple notes are still a bit more difficult than slider so it's better to use them on Insane.
[Normal]
00:36:161 (1,2) - this rhythm confuses me. The undermentioned one will be more expected for a player, especially for beginners:

SPOILER

01:40:161 (1,2,3) - same
[Bakari's Easy]
00:32:161 (3) - awww, so inventively
02:10:161 (1) - I really don't understand, why do you skip strong beat on white tick. I'd prefer next rhythm:

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