1. Dream (1.49 stars, 145 notes)
2. LIFE (4.97 stars, 597 notes)
3. Love (4.24 stars, 302 notes)

banvi wrote:

Hello

mod

SPOILER

General
I seem you are a bigineer mapper.
Spacing is bad Spacing is important.
You should use distance snap.
First , you should fix spacing :3

Example : http://osu.ppy.sh/p/faq#c3
This URL click please. → 10: Map design issue → Unintuitive Spacing

Breath(Easy)
Oh? Work in progress?
If you don't use second half , delete timing point of second half please.
Dream(Normal)
00:28:837 (3,4) You shouldn't add jump like this. I think , don't add jump in easy & normal LV.
01:03:010 (4) new combo
01:04:054 (1) remove new combo
01:11:367 (5) new combo
01:30:141 (5) ^
02:34:845 (7) ^(this combo is too long for normal)
02:53:106 (9) ^
Love(Hard)
Silder Velocity is same as all diff...
I recommend 1.60 this diff.
Circle Size -1
LIFE(Insane)
00:17:106 (1,2) I don't recommend this pattern. (2) circle is hiden by (1) silder.

And , in my experience, Rhythm Rookies usually don't know kudosu rule.
If mod is helpful , click Give kudos please.
But Don't give kudos to those who give you star only.
kudosu is like a thank you mod.

First ,fix spacing. Unless you don't fix spacing , modders will not be able to do mod
But rhythm is good.
star~
fight!

yangzd88 wrote:

恩恩!现在好多了 星~
Mod

红色是确定(70%) 蓝色是建议(40%) 黑色只是自己的意见(10%)

[Insane]
作图必须要开distance snap
不过为什么你的spacing是0.8x(每个难度都是)
按住alt键调整一下吧
00:47:367 - 00:50:237 insert break time
00:55:454 (7,8,9) - 这个蛋疼的陷阱……(?)
01:12:150 (2) - 没用distance snap?
01:46:585 (7) - New combo
01:58:324 - 02:00:420 insert break time
02:13:715 - 02:17:376 这个串……怎么一直在中心连打?
03:20:759 (1,1,1) - 中间加 break time

[Hard]
Note大小调大一格
breaktime的问题呢……只要见到很大的间隔就最好加上吧

[Easy]
Easy不能有跳和串!

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LZ的图节奏下的很好(尤其是EZ和NM)
修改一下snapping会更好……时间不早了 明天继续mod

eveless wrote:

[General]
多开AIMOD自己看看吧，虽然说INSANE HARD可以不用在意它，但是EZ和NORMAL还是要确保没有各种SPACING问题的。
BG格式不正确，请把它改为800*600正确格式。
文件夹里的OSB文件请删除然后FULLSUBMIT，并确保它在每次上传前都没有，如果你不做SB的话。
全部的KIAI线都没在线上。

[Easy]
EZ各种SPACING混乱，嗯还是统一一下比较好
自己多仔细看一下SPACING吧，要改的太多了，不要关DS。我这里只是列举了一些SPACING问题。

00:11:628(4) 跟三的尾巴叠一起比较好
00:12:411(5,1) 不支持这种排法，特别是在EZ里
00:15:793(4,5) spacing
00:20:497(4,5) ^
00:26:489(3,4,5) ^
00:29:628 (1,2,3,4) ^
00:34:845 (2,3,4,5,6)这种奇妙的倾斜感是什么。。最好还是横竖对齐或者索性斜的明显点对称点对齐点
00:46：324(1,2,3)被前面的SLIDER挡住了
00:52:584(4,5) 对齐
01:25:976(7) 拿掉折返的中间的CLAP

[Normal]
和EZ基本一样。估计只是EZ的完成版吧？如果这样的话这个难度还不如删除或者把EZ删了。
依然是各种SPACING问题

[Hard]
好吧，HARD只是NOTE变小了。建议你NORMAL和EZ重做。这个HARD本身还是不错。不过SPACING问题。。。请往上看EZ部分
00:07:845(4) 往后放红线上 或者在红线加个NOTE
00:43:976(4) spacing
00:53:106(1,2,3) spacing 并且这部分跟后面的挤一起看着很难受
00:59:106(5)建议换SLIDER直到后面那根红线 然后SPIN再在之后的白线即00:59:889开始，结束时间不变。如果不改的话SPIN至少放在线上
01:08:498(5)这之后的SLIDER和NOTE都没叠好
后半部分基本和前面一样的问题

[Insane]
这还真是各种相似。

00:58:846(6,7) 位置反了


加油吧
STAR

yangzd88 wrote:

恩……改好了吗
为什么更新了之后后两个难度读不出来BG啊……

Sunny Holic wrote:

General
kiai time 太长了。
没设置preview point

Breath
00:29:106 (3) - 不能在下一个slider上面。想办法改一下～
00:36:932 (6) - 不能在下一个slider上面。再往上弯一点～
00:45:280 (9) - 跟8没重叠好哦，按alt键，distance snap用 0.0x
01:07:193 (1,2,3,4) - 这里也是～跟上面一样解决～ 4的尾巴不要被3覆盖好看点
01:13:454 (1) - ^
01:20:758 (7,8,9) - ^
01:30:150 (5,6,7,8) - ^
没用到的timing删掉吧～

Dream
00:12:932 (1) - unrank要素，不能被覆盖～
00:17:106 (1) - 用0.0x对好～
00:29:628 (1) - 这里也想办法不跟4重叠吧
00:42:150 (6,7,8,9) - 用0.0x对好～
01:07:193 (1,2,3,4) - ^
01:17:628 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 稍微没对上，用0.0x对好～
02:11:889 (1,2,3,4) - 用0.0x对好～
02:23:367 (2) - 这slider也差不多一半被盖住了
02:33:802 (6) - 用0.0x对好～
02:40:063 (2,3) - 太近了
02:56:758 (4,5) - 用0.0x对好～
03:05:106 (2) - ^
03:28:324 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 稍微没对上，用0.0x对好～

Love
00:10:845 (6) - unrank要素，不能被覆盖～
这些问题，我不一一提了。
Overall Difficulty +2格
HP Drain rate +2格

Eternal LIFE
最好不要用比normal小的圈圈了。这会非常难玩
别用小的圈圈，用更高的 Slider Velocity就能做 Insane。insane的话，推荐1.8~2.0


rank第一个图很难，加油吧！我的第一个图还没rank呢…… 后来做的图rank的更快……

Astom wrote:

Hi~
Maybe important, In blue suggestions
[General]
-YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY).osb delete it and full submit
-Set preview point in all diff at the same time (Timing -> Set Current Position...)

[Easy]
-If u are not going to map after 01:36:411 delete timing points

[Hard]
-02:18:932 new combo, try to use new combo in changes of spacing like this because is confusing when u are playing

Uhmm in general I think "this is hard of play" (Hard and Insane), so many changes in spacing and stack of circles try to make it more clear.
Well I like the song so a star for that ~

deepsea wrote:

Insane

00:55:97 (10)-(12) Sudden space change noooo

Hard

00:55:97 (10)-(12) Same as Insane

02:06:93(1) - (8) Another unreadable space change D:

02:17:88(1) - (11) ^

Normal

00:38:49 (1) - (6) Spacing change hmm not good in normal

roflninja wrote:

Hi,

[easy]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
00:55:715 (2,3,4) - something about this seems wierd to me, but I have no idea, looks fine

[normal]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
maybe +1 to hp drain? your choice
01:46:584 (6) - new combo?

[hard]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes

[insane]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
+1 to hp drain?

good job

• Hitcircle边缘很模糊 Combo数字也不容易看清
  还有每个难度里都有许多Unsnapped Note

• 00:33:802(1):开头处+Finish
  00:50:497-01:03:019:这一段没有Hitsound?
  01:02:497(5):去掉Finish
  01:03:019(1):Finish
  01:19:715(5):new combo

• 00:17:106(1):Finish
  00:29:628(1):结尾处+Clap
  00:50:497(1):Finish
  00:50:497-01:03:019:同Easy
  00:58:845(2):Finish
  00:59:367(3,4,5,1):有点乱 建议把5后面的移开
  01:19:715(1):开头处+Finish
  02:00:411(1,2,3):距离
  02:16:063:+1 circle
  02:23:367:结尾处+Clap
  02:29:889(11):去掉Clap
  02:34:845(7):New combo
  02:54:411(14,1):距离太近了
  02:58:332(7,8):距离太远了
  03:08:237(8):New combo
  03:29:106(4):Finish并New combo
  03:29:367(1):去掉New combo

• 00:34:324(3,4,5,6):距离
  00:47:367-00:50:237:加Break Time
  00:55:976(10,11,12):距离太近
  01:29:889(6,7):距离太远
  02:26:498(3):开头处+Finish
  03:04:063(2):^
  03:28:324:+1 circle
  03:29:106(4):开头处+Finish

• 00:17:106(1):开头处+Finish
  00:33:280(4,5,6,7,1):重叠比较好
  00:41:637(12):Clap
  00:58:846(2):Finish
  00:59:628:转盘在这里开始
  01:03:019(1):Finish
  01:19:715(1):^
  02:30:641(1):^
  01:53:898(1,2,3,...,16,17):Combo数最好不要超过15
  02:44:497:转盘在这里开始
  03:09:811(7):Clap
  03:28:324:+1 circle