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FELT - Puppet in the Dark

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MirinH
726 posts
Joined January 2013
Topic Starter
MirinH
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2015年7月10日 at 19:03:15

Artist: FELT
Title: Puppet in the Dark
Source: 東方Project
Tags: touhou 東方神霊廟 ~ Ten Desires 豊聡耳 神子 聖徳伝説 ～ True Administrator Shoutoku Legend Toyosatomimi no Miko New Horizon Buried Away Vivenne Maurits"禅"Cornelis Renko Sevens Head Reitaisai12 例大祭12
BPM: 133
Filesize: 8179kb
Play Time: 06:37
Difficulties Available:
  1. Out Of Place ARTifactS (5.26 stars, 1583 notes)
Download: FELT - Puppet in the Dark
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4th Map


First Approved


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  1. #1 jonathanlfj
  2. #2 Gaia
  3. Karen
  4. #1 Karen
  5. #2 Xinely
  6. johnathanlfj
Last edited by MirinH , edited 27 times in total.
Hakurei Yoru
688 posts
Joined September 2013
Hakurei Yoru
[MKZ is god11111]
00:19:060 (4) - 放在00:18:609 (3) - 的直线上或者stack?现在这个样子没有太看懂用意，也不是很合适。
00:25:376 (4) - 呃……思考了一下 上面的那个应该是位置稍微下移？ 几个这样的摆法似乎都是在下面，同时for flow
00:20:188 (6) - 旋转180°放过来 这里是因为前后这样的节奏flow都是有相似点的，而这个相对不一样。
00:58:083 (8,9,10,11,1) - 为什么只有这里使用1/4+短滑呢
似乎连打上的音效有去跟歌词？
但是hitnormal和clap感觉音量差太打了……所以感觉很奇怪……产生了没打到的错觉
02:52:083 - 这段的节奏可以考虑跟一下歌词，音乐本身也有点弱，用当前的节奏会感觉clap太生硬。
03:51:030 (3,4) - x476 y260
05:58:397 (7) - 把滑条头的位置调整到1-2的线上吧，现在这个偏离度太欺负强迫症...
06:03:659 (3,8) - 不

？？？我是不是瞎了这个音效我听不懂

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Sakaue Nachi
558 posts
Joined September 2012
Sakaue Nachi
[general]
tag & source

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]
00:23:346 (4) - 这个样子感觉有点违和
00:32:594 ， 00:32:820 这两个地方有明显的音不同，节奏可以做点变化 http://puu.sh/iEw1A/543a6222fe.jpg
00:45:226 (10) - 同上
01:46:470 (4) - ctrl+g合曲一点柑橘
01:49:277 (3) - 旋转下方向朝斜上好点
02:17:698 (1,2,3,4) - 唔。。。滑条搞到红线吧，这节奏有点鸡巴，何况蓝线没音的，后面类似的不说了
02:30:680 (4,5) - 不弄一样吗
03:00:153 (1) - 这个弄成和后面那个一样？
03:05:065 (5,6,7,8,9) - 这个打起来柑橘不好，前面都是高速移动的flow这个突然停下来的感觉，做成移动连打带感点，后面类似不说了
03:10:503 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这里和前面一样的节奏为什么摆的时间不同呢、、、、前面白线起这里红线起
03:24:890 (5,6,7) - 这里移远点吧，像这种距离就爽点了03:27:433 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) -
03:35:854 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 试下这样都是下的方向距离渐增，感觉不错的样子 http://puu.sh/iEwLo/b7f6bd72b0.jpg
03:51:264 (4,5,6) - 什么鬼、、4,5打起来莫名
04:01:907 (1,2,3) - 这里这么重音，用大点间距啊
05:28:572 (1) - 这样? http://puu.sh/iEx09/35db798f38.jpg
05:42:432 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1) - 间距大点啊，正是爽的地方，这么缩
kunka
1,570 posts
Joined July 2012
kunka
From your MQ～

General

※I don't know a lot about the "touhou".sorry. Because it may be useful, I put it.
http://feltmusic.net/FELT016/ official website
http://ddby.jp/cd150100033a
It seems to be the song contents of the CD called the ”Sevens Head”.

※Aimod : There is only one error.http://puu.sh/iEylF.jpg

※BG : 1081*768!? 1024*768 or 1366*768 is safe.
Out Of Place ARTifactS

00:10:489 - I think that I can pick up a sound. Add circle.The same point.00:16:805 - 00:19:963 - 00:23:121 - 00:26:278 - 00:29:436 - 00:50:865 -

00:50:865 (3) - ctrl+G+α.I think that this has better flow.http://puu.sh/iEzTw.jpg

04:05:328 (4,5) - Please move to little under. It is easy to look at such.

05:26:116 (6) - Please match it with 05:25:414 (3) - x:204 y:282. it become beautiful.

GL :)
MirinH
726 posts
Joined January 2013
Topic Starter
MirinH
yoru

Hakurei Yoru wrote:

[MKZ is god11111]
00:19:060 (4) - 放在00:18:609 (3) - 的直线上或者stack?现在这个样子没有太看懂用意，也不是很合适。
00:25:376 (4) - 呃……思考了一下 上面的那个应该是位置稍微下移？ 几个这样的摆法似乎都是在下面，同时for flow :arrow: （我觉得人工stack很帅，所以nochange
00:20:188 (6) - 旋转180°放过来 这里是因为前后这样的节奏flow都是有相似点的，而这个相对不一样。 :arrow: k
00:58:083 (8,9,10,11,1) - 为什么只有这里使用1/4+短滑呢 :arrow: 因为只有这里有1/4
似乎连打上的音效有去跟歌词？
但是hitnormal和clap感觉音量差太打了……所以感觉很奇怪……产生了没打到的错觉
02:52:083 - 这段的节奏可以考虑跟一下歌词，音乐本身也有点弱，用当前的节奏会感觉clap太生硬。 :arrow: i dont follow vocal sry
03:51:030 (3,4) - x476 y260 :arrow: 太挤
05:58:397 (7) - 把滑条头的位置调整到1-2的线上吧，现在这个偏离度太欺负强迫症... :arrow: 欺负强迫症好爽啊哈哈哈哈
06:03:659 (3,8) - 不 :arrow: yes

？？？我是不是瞎了这个音效我听不懂

rankrankrakrankranrakrnakrnakrnakrnaknrakrank
nachi

Sakaue Nachi wrote:

[general]
tag & source :arrow: done

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]
00:23:346 (4) - 这个样子感觉有点违和 :arrow: 还好，不过后面有人说就改
00:32:594 ， 00:32:820 这两个地方有明显的音不同，节奏可以做点变化 http://puu.sh/iEw1A/543a6222fe.jpg :arrow: 啊，我不想在这里短滑
00:45:226 (10) - 同上 :arrow: ^
01:46:470 (4) - ctrl+g合曲一点柑橘 :arrow: 这样flow好一些柑橘
01:49:277 (3) - 旋转下方向朝斜上好点 :arrow: 我觉得这样更好
02:17:698 (1,2,3,4) - 唔。。。滑条搞到红线吧，这节奏有点鸡巴，何况蓝线没音的，后面类似的不说了 :arrow: 诶，我是为了兼顾打击感下的节奏
02:30:680 (4,5) - 不弄一样吗
03:00:153 (1) - 这个弄成和后面那个一样？ :arrow: 我柑橘这样比较帅
03:05:065 (5,6,7,8,9) - 这个打起来柑橘不好，前面都是高速移动的flow这个突然停下来的感觉，做成移动连打带感点，后面类似不说了 :arrow: 啊，其实我比较喜欢这种
03:10:503 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这里和前面一样的节奏为什么摆的时间不同呢、、、、前面白线起这里红线起 :arrow: fixed
03:24:890 (5,6,7) - 这里移远点吧，像这种距离就爽点了03:27:433 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - :arrow: 厚
03:35:854 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 试下这样都是下的方向距离渐增，感觉不错的样子 http://puu.sh/iEwLo/b7f6bd72b0.jpg :arrow: 啊，我不想加连打ds
03:51:264 (4,5,6) - 什么鬼、、4,5打起来莫名 :arrow: 诶，所以我需要建议啊
04:01:907 (1,2,3) - 这里这么重音，用大点间距啊 :arrow: 前面没用你不是没吐槽o.o
05:28:572 (1) - 这样? http://puu.sh/iEx09/35db798f38.jpg :arrow: vocal不短滑
05:42:432 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1) - 间距大点啊，正是爽的地方，这么缩 :arrow: 厚
kunka

kunkakunkakunkakunka wrote:

From your MQ～

General

※I don't know a lot about the "touhou".sorry. Because it may be useful, I put it.
http://feltmusic.net/FELT016/ official website
http://ddby.jp/cd150100033a
It seems to be the song contents of the CD called the ”Sevens Head”. :arrow: i didnt upload with the metadata，sry for the mistake

※Aimod : There is only one error.http://puu.sh/iEylF.jpg :arrow: fixed

※BG : 1081*768!? 1024*768 or 1366*768 is safe.
:arrow: i think is ok，but if anyone say taht again ill change it
Out Of Place ARTifactS

00:10:489 - I think that I can pick up a sound. Add circle.The same point.00:16:805 - 00:19:963 - 00:23:121 - 00:26:278 - 00:29:436 - 00:50:865 - :arrow: but i dont really want to follow that, for here i follow the piano only

00:50:865 (3) - ctrl+G+α.I think that this has better flow.http://puu.sh/iEzTw.jpg :arrow: but i dont want that kind of flow

04:05:328 (4,5) - Please move to little under. It is easy to look at such. :arrow: no

05:26:116 (6) - Please match it with 05:25:414 (3) - x:204 y:282. it become beautiful. :arrow: its okay for now

GL :)
thx for the mods
Crimmi
1,947 posts
Joined June 2009
Crimmi
IRC Mod.
17:04 Mackenzie: XD
17:04 Mackenzie: can you not nazi
17:04 Crimmi: Nazi?
17:05 Mackenzie: you can write a little, its fine, but dont be nazi
17:05 Mackenzie: like ctrlg or blanket stuff
17:05 Mackenzie: dont write anything like that
17:05 Crimmi: No problem.
17:05 Mackenzie: k, great
17:06 Crimmi: You want me to do an IRC mod or you want me to post in the forum?
17:06 Mackenzie: both are fine
17:06 Crimmi: alright, let me feed my dog, i'll be right back quick
17:14 Mackenzie: is your doge full now
17:14 Crimmi: yea.
17:15 Mackenzie: gr8
17:15 Crimmi: First of all, your BG, the dimension is off.
17:15 Crimmi: it's 1081x768
17:15 Mackenzie: ok
17:15 Crimmi: The requirement is 1024x768
17:15 Mackenzie: will fix later
17:15 Crimmi: Okay.
17:20 Crimmi: 01:03:496 (5) - This sounds a bit off on the blue tick, don't you think?
17:20 Mackenzie: how
17:21 Mackenzie: oh
17:21 Mackenzie: i just want to have a cicle there
17:21 Mackenzie: and let playewrs hit it
17:23 Crimmi: Yeah, but it doesn't sound good at all, even at 50% speed I checked it to make sure if I was wrong and it was off.
17:23 Mackenzie: plays ok though
17:24 Mackenzie: because players wont notice
17:24 Mackenzie: and plays better
17:24 Crimmi: Are you sure?
17:24 Mackenzie: yes
17:24 Crimmi: You can even place it in 1/6th and it'll sound the way you want it to be.
17:24 Mackenzie: alot patterns like this are in ranked map(
17:24 Mackenzie: 1/6 too fast
17:25 Crimmi: Well if that issue comes up, don't say I didn't warn you xD
17:25 Mackenzie: ;w; they wont dq for this trust me
17:26 Crimmi: Because after 01:03:496 (5), the player would have to hit (6) at a split second towards a jump at (7) and we're just in the calm part of the song.
17:27 Mackenzie: not clam compare to the previus part(
17:28 Mackenzie: yes thats my point
17:29 Crimmi: 01:08:008 (10) - This slider is kinda overlapping with (1) which is kind of unrankable. . .
17:29 Mackenzie: its rankable
17:29 Mackenzie: unrankble in hard
17:35 Crimmi: Alright.
17:40 Crimmi: 01:44:891 (6,7,8) - Inconsistent spacing here.
17:42 Mackenzie: random jumps are fine
17:42 Mackenzie: you dont need to ds all the notes
17:52 Crimmi: 03:05:065 (5,6,7,8) Maybe this could be better stacked?
17:53 Crimmi: 03:20:328 (3,4,5,6,7) - Maybe this could look better as a star pattern.
17:53 Mackenzie: welp if anyone else says this ill change all patterns like this
17:53 Mackenzie: previous modded suggest me to change to a stream lol
17:53 Mackenzie: no
17:53 Mackenzie: i dont do star pattern
17:54 Crimmi: Well I am not telling you to change your stream, it's just the hitbursts might impair the player, depending on what skin they use.
17:55 Mackenzie: you should able to read all 5 notes before the first brust
17:55 Crimmi: I see.
17:57 Crimmi: 03:35:591 (2,3,4) - There is no way a player could see that coming, most of the notes are hidden behind (2).
17:58 Mackenzie: will consider if anoder moder says
17:59 Mackenzie: because players able to play this will use invisible skin right?
18:01 Crimmi: Not all players use the invisible skin
18:01 Crimmi: 04:18:573 (11,12,13,14,15) - The gap between these is a bit too wide imo here, but if wish not to change, fine.
18:03 Mackenzie: ill keep then, its fine imo, and the map need jumps like this
18:03 Crimmi: But that wide, even with triplets?
18:04 Mackenzie: its not a stream triple
18:04 Mackenzie: so i think its fine
18:04 Crimmi: Meh, ok.
18:07 Crimmi: Well then, the rest of the map is fine, good work.
Kencho
952 posts
Joined August 2013
Kencho
[General]
  1. 沒找出什麼

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]
  1. 02:27:171 (10,6) - 疊一起？
    02:02:084 (9) - 雖然這裡是7/4，但這數字也太大了，NC吧
    02:11:908 (9) - ^
    02:23:662 (1) - NC
    02:36:119 (7) - NC
    02:53:487 (7) - NC
    03:29:275 (6,2) - 沒疊好
    03:52:433 (2,6) - 沒疊好
    04:18:047 (7) - NC
    04:20:677 (2) - 這個也NC？因為你跟了人聲
    04:21:906 (1) - 弄彎？

  2. 把sliderslide的音效禁了吧，太難聽了

    01:57:698 - 加個圓圈？
    03:13:837 (9,10) - 我覺得這個不要overmap，換回一個1/2滑條會比較好，可以讓玩家緩一下
最後還是摸不出什麼，不過節奏和音效都下的很到位啊，找不出什麼可以改的地方了，祝順利起飛
jonathanlfj
Elite Mapper
2,568 posts
Joined February 2010
jonathanlfj
[General]
normal-hitnormal is a little too quiet compared to the default soft you are using, here is a louder one: http://puu.sh/iGxEe.wav
soft-hitclap has a 10ms delay, i removed it for you here so its rankable now: http://puu.sh/iGxId.wav

i suggest you use 16:9 wall paper since 4:3 bg will pixilate a lot in widescreen mode:
SPOILER

[nice diff name]
02:00:856 (2) - clap
02:19:101 (1,1,2) - this is a little hard to read even with your NC on the first circle, recommend you remove the stacking or use contrasting combo colours instead (yellow and dark purple for example)
03:19:100 (1) - remove NC since you didnt NC at later sections with the same pattern
03:35:591 (2,3,4) - this is very difficult to read even with a transparent skin, i suggest you make a more outward angle on the triplets
03:41:205 (1) - NC is not really needed here
04:10:854 (6,7) - because of auto stacking these two overlap each other during gameplay, you might want to manual stack 04:11:029 (7,8,9)
04:46:819 (7,8,9,10,1) - i found this compact stream really difficult to read especially with the more spaced stream right afterwards, i suggest you use the same spacing as 03:39:451 (1,2,3,4,1) -
05:03:660 (8,9,10,11) - this plays much better as two 1/4 sliders which leads naturally into the next compact stream
05:59:976 (10) - ctrl+g flows better here imo

well get more sp and we can probably push this forward (get a double check on the timing signatures as well)
MirinH
726 posts
Joined January 2013
Topic Starter
MirinH
ken

Kencho wrote:

[General]
  1. 沒找出什麼

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]
  1. 02:27:171 (10,6) - 疊一起？ :arrow: 现在就好
    02:02:084 (9) - 雖然這裡是7/4，但這數字也太大了，NC吧 :arrow: 两位数没啥吧。。。
    02:11:908 (9) - ^
    02:23:662 (1) - NC
    02:36:119 (7) - NC
    02:53:487 (7) - NC :arrow: ^
    03:29:275 (6,2) - 沒疊好
    03:52:433 (2,6) - 沒疊好 :arrow: 你们这都能notice真是服了
    04:18:047 (7) - NC
    04:20:677 (2) - 這個也NC？因為你跟了人聲 :arrow: 我觉得按白线nc挺好
    04:21:906 (1) - 弄彎？ :arrow: no

  2. 把sliderslide的音效禁了吧，太難聽了 :arrow: ？？？我禁了啊

    01:57:698 - 加個圓圈？ :arrow: 这个idea不错
    03:13:837 (9,10) - 我覺得這個不要overmap，換回一個1/2滑條會比較好，可以讓玩家緩一下 :arrow: 没有overmap，仔细听
最後還是摸不出什麼，不過節奏和音效都下的很到位啊，找不出什麼可以改的地方了，祝順利起飛
jonathan

jonathanlfj wrote:

[General]
normal-hitnormal is a little too quiet compared to the default soft you are using, here is a louder one: http://puu.sh/iGxEe.wav
soft-hitclap has a 10ms delay, i removed it for you here so its rankable now: http://puu.sh/iGxId.wav

i suggest you use 16:9 wall paper since 4:3 bg will pixilate a lot in widescreen mode:
SPOILER
:arrow: all fixed thx
[nice diff name]
02:00:856 (2) - clap :arrow: oops
02:19:101 (1,1,2) - this is a little hard to read even with your NC on the first circle, recommend you remove the stacking or use contrasting combo colours instead (yellow and dark purple for example) :arrow: moved a bit
03:19:100 (1) - remove NC since you didnt NC at later sections with the same pattern
03:35:591 (2,3,4) - this is very difficult to read even with a transparent skin, i suggest you make a more outward angle on the triplets :arrow: someone said it before and i was consider about it, now changed
03:41:205 (1) - NC is not really needed here
04:10:854 (6,7) - because of auto stacking these two overlap each other during gameplay, you might want to manual stack 04:11:029 (7,8,9) :arrow: fixed
04:46:819 (7,8,9,10,1) - i found this compact stream really difficult to read especially with the more spaced stream right afterwards, i suggest you use the same spacing as 03:39:451 (1,2,3,4,1) - :arrow: yep,changed
05:03:660 (8,9,10,11) - this plays much better as two 1/4 sliders which leads naturally into the next compact stream :arrow: i dont feel like to use 1/4 sliders here, i want here to be all steams , maybe it just my feeling to the song
05:59:976 (10) - ctrl+g flows better here imo :arrow: now is better imo

well get more sp and we can probably push this forward (get a double check on the timing signatures as well)
thx for the mods
Crystal
Former osu!catch Champion: 2018
1,123 posts
Joined June 2012
Crystal
m4m

[diffname]
00:41:391 (5) - 上下两端不弄平行吗
00:59:662 (3) - 和00:58:534 (11,1) - 一样的间距? 因为完全stack你好像都用的是3/4滑条+圈
02:24:189 (9,10,11) - 间距没统一
02:24:540 (12,13,14) - ^
02:25:417 (3,4,5) - ^
02:40:329 (2) - 考虑这样? 现在这个感觉莫名的违和 *http://puu.sh/iGSyC/74c69feb64.jpg
03:19:802 (1) - 36|340? 或者更远的地方 有点爽 高速滑条之后stack感觉冲击感美丽 如果改别忘记调整后面的
03:51:381 (5) - 我可能更倾向于stack在4上
04:02:433 (4) - ctrl+g吧 现在这个样子感觉舒展不开
04:43:660 (5,6,7,8) - 5不在直线上
04:59:449 (6,7) - 这样? *http://puu.sh/iGSTb/fb9c5db709.jpg 钝角跳好容易路人啊
05:40:502 (1) - 和之前提到的一样

美丽
水不出东西

good luck!
Voxnola
729 posts
Joined May 2013
Voxnola
not a m4m


not much mod here ;-; feel free to ignore all of these
Incoming bad mod

[general]
01:38:400 - this section is actually 7/4 also
02:17:698 - so is this. There's no reason for the extra red points
03:42:258 - here too
None of this really matters though. Just thought I'd point it out
rawr

[OuT oF pLaCe StUfF]
00:12:970 (5) - this slider looks more condenced than your previous and preceding sliders. Uncondence a bit?
00:31:128 (3) - maybe nc things like this? It was a bit sudden for first play
02:36:119 (7) - maybe add whistle or soft finish to this? (more percussive emphasis)
03:05:065 (5,6,7,8,9) - ヾ(＠⌒ー⌒＠)ノ
03:21:907 (4) - this looks crooked compared to your other triples
03:35:942 (4) - this looks crooked compared to your other triples
03:41:381 (4) - add finish for the percussive stuffs hue
03:41:381 (4) - soft finish or whistle?
03:55:591 (6) - ^slider end here... just for sounds like that
04:00:679 (8) - soft finish?
04:49:625 (1) - add whistle for piano?
04:54:449 (2,3) - the slider before these is fast and sudden. I think unstacking these two circles could feel pretty cool with the faster slider.
EX
04:55:239 (8) - I feel this could be more active. You could get rid of the reverses and at two circles to the head of 1?
EX
05:06:116 (1) - I feel the head sounds empty. Though idk what should be put on it. finish? :/ merp <-- juusut ignore this
05:27:870 (1) - add whistle?
05:28:397 (4) - add finish?
05:34:537 (8,9,10,11,1) - ヾ(＠⌒ー⌒＠)ノ
06:02:958 - cool

not much to mod here hue
MirinH
726 posts
Joined January 2013
Topic Starter
MirinH
crystal

Crystal wrote:

m4m

[diffname]
00:41:391 (5) - 上下两端不弄平行吗 :arrow: 这一段是特意这样的
00:59:662 (3) - 和00:58:534 (11,1) - 一样的间距? 因为完全stack你好像都用的是3/4滑条+圈 :arrow: 好像也是
02:24:189 (9,10,11) - 间距没统一
02:24:540 (12,13,14) - ^
02:25:417 (3,4,5) - ^ :arrow: 好像也是，我也觉得这里不好看
02:40:329 (2) - 考虑这样? 现在这个感觉莫名的违和 *http://puu.sh/iGSyC/74c69feb64.jpg :arrow: 我觉得还好
03:19:802 (1) - 36|340? 或者更远的地方 有点爽 高速滑条之后stack感觉冲击感美丽 如果改别忘记调整后面的 :arrow: 就是要美丽冲击感啊
03:51:381 (5) - 我可能更倾向于stack在4上 :arrow: 太难读
04:02:433 (4) - ctrl+g吧 现在这个样子感觉舒展不开 :arrow: 其实还好
04:43:660 (5,6,7,8) - 5不在直线上 :arrow: :arrow: 我看不出
04:59:449 (6,7) - 这样? *http://puu.sh/iGSTb/fb9c5db709.jpg 钝角跳好容易路人啊 :arrow: 厚
05:40:502 (1) - 和之前提到的一样

美丽
水不出东西

good luck!
natoshi

Naitoshi wrote:

not a m4m


not much mod here ;-; feel free to ignore all of these
Incoming bad mod

[general]
01:38:400 - this section is actually 7/4 also
02:17:698 - so is this. There's no reason for the extra red points
03:42:258 - here too
None of this really matters though. Just thought I'd point it out
rawr :arrow: wtf i changed to 7/4 and i actually felt its legit,changed

[OuT oF pLaCe StUfF]
00:12:970 (5) - this slider looks more condenced than your previous and preceding sliders. Uncondence a bit? :arrow: its fine
00:31:128 (3) - maybe nc things like this? It was a bit sudden for first play :arrow: i think it plays fine, nc gave a short combo
02:36:119 (7) - maybe add whistle or soft finish to this? (more percussive emphasis) :arrow: added soft finish,but idont like nc in middle of combo
03:05:065 (5,6,7,8,9) - ヾ(＠⌒ー⌒＠)ノ :arrow: (´・ω・`)
03:21:907 (4) - this looks crooked compared to your other triples
03:35:942 (4) - this looks crooked compared to your other triples :arrow: not crooked at all imo
03:41:381 (4) - add finish for the percussive stuffs hue :arrow: there is no finish in the bgm
03:41:381 (4) - soft finish or whistle?
03:55:591 (6) - ^slider end here... just for sounds like that :arrow: idlike to ignore the piano in this section lol
04:00:679 (8) - soft finish? :arrow: yep
04:49:625 (1) - add whistle for piano? :arrow: gr8
04:54:449 (2,3) - the slider before these is fast and sudden. I think unstacking these two circles could feel pretty cool with the faster slider. :arrow: ahh i think its ok
04:55:239 (8) - I feel this could be more active. You could get rid of the reverses and at two circles to the head of 1? :arrow: changed the order
05:06:116 (1) - I feel the head sounds empty. Though idk what should be put on it. finish? :/ merp <-- juusut ignore this :arrow: i dont over hs
05:27:870 (1) - add whistle? :arrow: k
05:28:397 (4) - add finish? :arrow: k
05:34:537 (8,9,10,11,1) - ヾ(＠⌒ー⌒＠)ノ :arrow: (´・ω・`)
06:02:958 - cool :arrow: thx

not much to mod here hue
thx for the mods
Gaia
2,808 posts
Joined May 2013
Gaia
m4m

[Feruto]
00:42:293 (7) - kinda nazi but move it up a little more for no overlap (or close to )
00:57:857 (7) - pretty much crossmap,, please nerf this its still a calm part lol
01:07:331 (8) - ^
01:19:060 (5) - ^
02:19:277 - there's a note here, cirlce here for good polarity or change 02:19:101 (7,8) - entirely into a slider. also i dont recommend the stack cuz it's hard to read
02:35:241 (2) - even the spacing out please, also slight nerf?
02:54:013 (10,11,12) - yeah nerf slightly please, sth like this looks more reasonable http://puu.sh/iKjBC/bde6dd2abd.jpg
03:50:679 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - suddenly switching from 1/4 to 1/3 is really weird rhythming to play, i highly recommend using reverse sliders here
03:55:942 (7) - there's really no reason for this to be so spaced out imo
04:10:678 (5,6,7) - this spacing is really gross lol
04:17:696 (5,6) - massive jumps..
04:18:749 (13,14) - oh no
04:51:379 (1,2,3) - u should ctrl+g the rhythm so the reverse goes first, it allows players to know that this section is 1/3 and not 1/2
05:03:660 (8) - exact same pattern as 05:00:853 (1) - , so needs NC i guess?
05:08:221 - lmao this break doesnt really make sense imo, a normal looks more natural
05:27:520 (7) - wooah i know you're jumping but calm down a little here
05:27:870 (1,2,3,4) - and actually the musical intensity decreases here... huge jumps dont fit imo

i'm not really a fan of speedranking so u can find me again once 2 weeks is up
also make sure of the timing yeah lmao
MokouSmoke
495 posts
Joined May 2013
MokouSmoke
Hi there!

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]

00:11:842 (2,3) - I'll just make one comment here about stacking and leave the rest to you
00:31:128 (3,4) - This doesn't follow the music. Maybe try something like this?
SPOILER
00:33:948 (2,3) - This could be confused as a 1/4 rhythm. Unstack?
02:07:522 (12,13) - Looks nicer if you bend sliders like this
SPOILER
02:13:399 (3) - change this to two circles instead so it's similar to rest of section?
02:17:698 (1) - couldn't tell on playthrough that slider ended on blue tick. Just extend to white tick and remove 02:18:049 (2)
02:19:101 (7,8,9) - feels a little awkward here. Maybe unstack 02:19:101 (7) - and add a note at 02:19:277 ?
02:36:996 (11,12,13,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - idk why but this part was really fun to play :)
02:52:083 (1,2,3,4) - big jumps quite suddenly, maybe tone down the first few jumps?
03:28:924 (4,5) - feels strange. Unstack 03:29:100 (5) and make this jump bigger to match some of the other jumps.
03:34:714 (5,6) - bigger jump here
06:05:414 (1) - Personal preference, but maybe remove NC here and add at 06:05:765 (2) so 06:05:063 (7,8,1) are all the same color? Same with all the other similar patterns

Sorry I didn't find much wrong. Overall fun map. Have a star :)
Bara-
11,955 posts
Joined April 2013
Bara-
M4M (your queue)

[General]
It all seems fine

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]
  1. 00:28:308 (2,3) - You can try to blanket them for the nice touch
  2. 00:30:790 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,1) - Can you please space out the circles a little? With this, I mean moving (3) to 384:236 for example (I kinda dislike stacks in such cases)
  3. 00:43:421 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,1) - ^^
  4. 01:21:429 (1) - Don't you think this spinner is a little to long? It's more then 10 seconds which is really exhausting
  5. 02:08:224 (2,3,5) - This looks pretty confusing, due to the spacing being incredibly low. You can choose to stack (3,5), as it'll be easier to read this way
  6. 02:12:522 (13) - This circle feels really weird and overdone. There is no sound here. It also feels overshadowed by the other circles as those have quite loud hitsounds, so a nearly silent note feels really weird, mostly because the normal-hitnormal is really low-volumed
  7. 02:19:101 (7,8,9) - This feels really awkward due to the distance, as it really looks like 1/2. Perhaps you should stack (7,8) and move (9) a little more apart, or make (7) a 3/4 slider
  8. 02:56:293 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This feels really weird, if you slow down to 25%, you'll hear it's really off-tune to the vocals. (Move them back 1/8 fixes it IMO)
  9. 03:41:556 (1) - To what sound is this snapped? I don't hear any 1/3 at all. It still sounds like 1/4 to me
  10. 03:50:679 (6,7,8,9,10) - The 1/3 comes really sudden, I think you're better off making this a 1/3 reverse slider (with a NC for consistency) Nevertheless, as you NC all 1/3 parts, NC it here as well
  11. 04:01:731 (13,14,1) - A stack feels a little boring, space them a little so you at least have some movement (following the previous slider)
  12. 05:03:484 (6,7,8) - Please space these a little, the "high"-distance stream feels weird
  13. 06:03:659 (3,4,5,6,7) - Why not make this a flower pattern? It'll look much better
  14. 06:22:256 (5) - I think it's better to have this a 3/4 (or 1/1 slider + later spinner) for the vocals, as they seem to go on a bit
  15. 06:22:607 (1) - Ugh, and again a 10+ second spinner. Are you the reïncarnation of Happy30?

Wow, this map is good
Have a star, and the best of luck
Such a shame you didn't want Nazi mod, I like doing those :P
X Light
456 posts
Joined August 2012
X Light
M4M
[Out of Place ARTIfactS]
  1. 01:39:452 (5) - 这里5放在(500,48)这个方向比较顺
  2. 01:52:434 (8,9,10) - http://puu.sh/iLx9s/1614de8a7f.jpg
  3. 01:56:996 (7) - 后面加两个note转回来也可以http://puu.sh/iLxe8/d72efba57e.jpg
  4. 02:18:048 (2,3,4) - 不要藏在滑条尾吧...我打的时候还以为是滑条+2连那种 后面也是
  5. 03:09:626 (6,7) - 有点单调，感觉这里最好6高一些然后7低一些像这样http://puu.sh/iLxt0/2bbaf80df7.jpg
  6. 03:44:188 (10) - 这里开始听起来好乱...要是我下节奏我会这么下http://puu.sh/iLxZa/10f2b0bbbb.jpg
  7. 04:01:907 (1,2,3,4) - 这里比较适合摆折叠梗
  8. 04:47:520 (1) - 从这个note就可以开始甩了
  9. 05:33:835 (4) - 弯的好看
  10. 06:07:694 (8) - 这种地方不用跳效果也很好了
Adol Christin
875 posts
Joined October 2012
Adol Christin
Hi Dr Li. 听说摸了这个有票可拿？

  1. 00:12:293 (3,4) - 建议把滑条和单点对换下位置，跟音效和钢琴契合的更好。
  2. 00:33:835 - 这里干嘛不填上一个圈？如果你跟电子音的话这里就是漏音了。
  3. 00:46:466 - 这里同理
  4. 02:38:750 (8,9) - 只是建议：把这两个物件整体下移一点。8和滑条尾叠起来再接跳的话，对于这段vocal的话flow有些过于曲折了。
  5. 02:56:293 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - 逐渐加大的跳思路很有意思，但感觉加到后面跳稍微小了点。（或者是02:52:084 - 到02:55:065 - 这段间距有些太大，显得进入高潮的那段强烈的vocal不够突出了）
  6. 03:07:170 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 对这两个三连我觉得短滑条+单点比纯粹的单点三连要好
  7. 04:02:784 (5,6,7) - 用三连的第一个note去叠，而不是滑条头
  8. 04:13:135 (5,6) - 建议这两个叠起来，最好把5放在6上。因为vocal强度增大了，在平均间距如此小的地方这样的间距不足以形成反跳，所以不够搭。
  9. 04:44:537 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2) - 这两个连打间距我感觉反了。建议前面那个五连搞成大间距，后面那个三连缩小。
  10. 01:19:060 (5) - whistle？
  11. 01:40:856 (1) - 去掉finish
  12. 01:45:768 (1) - 同上。感觉没有必要每个小节都来个finish，太响了。推荐两个小节来一发，因为vocal平均两小节一换气。（实际上从02:17:698 - 开始你就是这样处理的）
  13. 06:22:607 (1) - 把转盘静音掉

祝你好运
cmn_891127
1,308 posts
Joined July 2010
cmn_891127
都是一些排版方面的建议……纯粹是为了好看,然而很多都是没用的
  1. 01:45:066 (7) - 这个note位置并不符合任何形状，又overlap，我大概会做成下面的样子
  2. 01:50:329 (7,1,2,3,5) - 这几个应该比较容易做成五角星吧
  3. 01:54:540 (6,8,9,10) - 我大概会做成正方形
  4. 01:55:943 (3,6) - 稍微移一点，让01:56:645 (5,6,7) - 间距相等
  5. 01:58:399 (2,3,6,7) - 正方形，同时让01:58:926 (6,11) - 相对于(8)对称
  6. 02:01:031 (3,4,5,6,7) - 我应该会围绕前面的(12)做一个十字形
  7. 02:02:259 (10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17) - 用convert slider to stream修正一下弧度
  8. 03:16:117 (5) - 让03:15:942 (4,5,6,7,8) - 成等边三角形
  9. 04:20:502 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 我改了下顺序和位置
  10. 04:41:906 (2,7) - 有一丢丢overlap，稍微错开一些
  11. 05:08:492 - 我觉得break移到这里是没有意义的，尽管是一个重拍，但并不是一段旋律的开始。我会把05:06:818 (1) - 这个去掉，因为这个音很延的，一个note过于短暂，还不如空掉
  12. 04:10:678 (5,6) - 这里距离是不是不太好
  13. 04:12:784 (4,5) - ^
关于音效
02:18:048 (2,3,4) - 我是不太习惯这种前面两个加鼓，后面空掉的感觉，我觉得可以在(4)上面加whistle，其实是蓝线音效太大声了，如果减小clap音量也好
02:20:680 (5) - 同理
MirinH
726 posts
Joined January 2013
Topic Starter
MirinH
ok too much mods to reply

Gaia wrote:

m4m

[Feruto]
00:42:293 (7) - kinda nazi but move it up a little more for no overlap (or close to ) :arrow: i like overlaping
00:57:857 (7) - pretty much crossmap,, please nerf this its still a calm part lol :arrow: the bpm is very low here, i think it plays fine though
01:07:331 (8) - ^
01:19:060 (5) - ^
02:19:277 - there's a note here, cirlce here for good polarity or change 02:19:101 (7,8) - entirely into a slider. also i dont recommend the stack cuz it's hard to read :arrow: i think stack is easier to read though compare to big spacing stuff
02:35:241 (2) - even the spacing out please, also slight nerf? :arrow: 1head to 2 is not a big spacing imo..
02:54:013 (10,11,12) - yeah nerf slightly please, sth like this looks more reasonable http://puu.sh/iKjBC/bde6dd2abd.jpg :arrow: im not nerfing =3=
03:50:679 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - suddenly switching from 1/4 to 1/3 is really weird rhythming to play, i highly recommend using reverse sliders here :arrow: its not fun,and now is fine to play
03:55:942 (7) - there's really no reason for this to be so spaced out imo :shock: there is imo
04:10:678 (5,6,7) - this spacing is really gross lol :arrow: :arrow: ok
04:17:696 (5,6) - massive jumps.. :arrow: yes
04:18:749 (13,14) - oh no :arrow: oh yeah
04:51:379 (1,2,3) - u should ctrl+g the rhythm so the reverse goes first, it allows players to know that this section is 1/3 and not 1/2 :arrow: fixed
05:03:660 (8) - exact same pattern as 05:00:853 (1) - , so needs NC i guess? :arrow: k
05:08:221 - lmao this break doesnt really make sense imo, a normal looks more natural :arrow: k
05:27:520 (7) - wooah i know you're jumping but calm down a little here :arrow: lol no im high
05:27:870 (1,2,3,4) - and actually the musical intensity decreases here... huge jumps dont fit imo :arrow: idk,but its my feeling to the song

i'm not really a fan of speedranking so u can find me again once 2 weeks is up
also make sure of the timing yeah lmao :arrow: ok lets b4b after

MokouSmoke wrote:

Hi there!

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]

00:11:842 (2,3) - I'll just make one comment here about stacking and leave the rest to you :arrow: no
00:31:128 (3,4) - This doesn't follow the music. Maybe try something like this? :arrow: i want to keep the sliders
SPOILER
00:33:948 (2,3) - This could be confused as a 1/4 rhythm. Unstack? :arrow: nobody would really be confused here...
02:07:522 (12,13) - Looks nicer if you bend sliders like this :arrow: ok
SPOILER
02:13:399 (3) - change this to two circles instead so it's similar to rest of section? :arrow: 02:08:232 (2,3) -
02:17:698 (1) - couldn't tell on playthrough that slider ended on blue tick. Just extend to white tick and remove 02:18:049 (2) :arrow: i want the players to hit the beats,not only give them the rhythm
02:19:101 (7,8,9) - feels a little awkward here. Maybe unstack 02:19:101 (7) - and add a note at 02:19:277 ? :arrow: it doesnt fit the rhythm
02:36:996 (11,12,13,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - idk why but this part was really fun to play :) :arrow: ok :)
02:52:083 (1,2,3,4) - big jumps quite suddenly, maybe tone down the first few jumps? :arrow: i think i have to let players feel that sudden change
03:28:924 (4,5) - feels strange. Unstack 03:29:100 (5) and make this jump bigger to match some of the other jumps. :arrow: plays ok imo
03:34:714 (5,6) - bigger jump here :arrow: legit,changed
06:05:414 (1) - Personal preference, but maybe remove NC here and add at 06:05:765 (2) so 06:05:063 (7,8,1) are all the same color? Same with all the other similar patterns :arrow: i dont do ncs on patterns

Sorry I didn't find much wrong. Overall fun map. Have a star :)

baraatje123 wrote:

M4M (your queue)

[General]
It all seems fine

[Out Of Place ARTifactS]
  1. 00:28:308 (2,3) - You can try to blanket them for the nice touch :arrow: i dont like blanket patterns
  2. 00:30:790 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,1) - Can you please space out the circles a little? With this, I mean moving (3) to 384:236 for example (I kinda dislike stacks in such cases) :arrow: not that far,but did something here
  3. 00:43:421 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,1) - ^^ :arrow: yep
  4. 01:21:429 (1) - Don't you think this spinner is a little to long? It's more then 10 seconds which is really exhausting :arrow: i have to because of the music
  5. 02:08:224 (2,3,5) - This looks pretty confusing, due to the spacing being incredibly low. You can choose to stack (3,5), as it'll be easier to read this way :arrow: i think its fine
  6. 02:12:522 (13) - This circle feels really weird and overdone. There is no sound here. It also feels overshadowed by the other circles as those have quite loud hitsounds, so a nearly silent note feels really weird, mostly because the normal-hitnormal is really low-volumed :arrow: i think overmap here is necessary for the players
  7. 02:19:101 (7,8,9) - This feels really awkward due to the distance, as it really looks like 1/2. Perhaps you should stack (7,8) and move (9) a little more apart, or make (7) a 3/4 slider :arrow: i added nc
  8. 02:56:293 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This feels really weird, if you slow down to 25%, you'll hear it's really off-tune to the vocals. (Move them back 1/8 fixes it IMO)
  9. 03:41:556 (1) - To what sound is this snapped? I don't hear any 1/3 at all. It still sounds like 1/4 to me :arrow: by another earphone
  10. 03:50:679 (6,7,8,9,10) - The 1/3 comes really sudden, I think you're better off making this a 1/3 reverse slider (with a NC for consistency) Nevertheless, as you NC all 1/3 parts, NC it here as well :arrow: added a nc
  11. 04:01:731 (13,14,1) - A stack feels a little boring, space them a little so you at least have some movement (following the previous slider) :arrow: stack is fine imo
  12. 05:03:484 (6,7,8) - Please space these a little, the "high"-distance stream feels weird :arrow: high ds streams is my favorite
  13. 06:03:659 (3,4,5,6,7) - Why not make this a flower pattern? It'll look much better :arrow: i dont like to do polygon patterns
  14. 06:22:256 (5) - I think it's better to have this a 3/4 (or 1/1 slider + later spinner) for the vocals, as they seem to go on a bit :arrow: k nice idea
  15. 06:22:607 (1) - Ugh, and again a 10+ second spinner. Are you the reïncarnation of Happy30? :arrow: maybe idk

Wow, this map is good
Have a star, and the best of luck
Such a shame you didn't want Nazi mod, I like doing those :P :arrow: baka

liuyiqiangbu wrote:

M4M
[Out of Place ARTIfactS]
  1. 01:39:452 (5) - 这里5放在(500,48)这个方向比较顺 :arrow: 还好
  2. 01:52:434 (8,9,10) - http://puu.sh/iLx9s/1614de8a7f.jpg :arrow: 我不跟vocal
  3. 01:56:996 (7) - 后面加两个note转回来也可以http://puu.sh/iLxe8/d72efba57e.jpg :arrow: 我也觉得我这里排的不行很好，改了
  4. 02:18:048 (2,3,4) - 不要藏在滑条尾吧...我打的时候还以为是滑条+2连那种 后面也是 :arrow: 读图风暴来袭
  5. 03:09:626 (6,7) - 有点单调，感觉这里最好6高一些然后7低一些像这样http://puu.sh/iLxt0/2bbaf80df7.jpg :arrow: 。。。什么单调
  6. 03:44:188 (10) - 这里开始听起来好乱...要是我下节奏我会这么下http://puu.sh/iLxZa/10f2b0bbbb.jpg :arrow: 你这样下忽略太多节奏了。。。
  7. 04:01:907 (1,2,3,4) - 这里比较适合摆折叠梗 :arrow: 我不喜欢折叠梗
  8. 04:47:520 (1) - 从这个note就可以开始甩了 :arrow: ？？？？？
  9. 05:33:835 (4) - 弯的好看 :arrow: k
  10. 06:07:694 (8) - 这种地方不用跳效果也很好了 :arrow: ？？

Adol Christin wrote:

Hi Dr Li. 听说摸了这个有票可拿？

  1. 00:12:293 (3,4) - 建议把滑条和单点对换下位置，跟音效和钢琴契合的更好。 :arrow: 我并没有在跟钢琴，仔细听bgm
  2. 00:33:835 - 这里干嘛不填上一个圈？如果你跟电子音的话这里就是漏音了。 :arrow: k
  3. 00:46:466 - 这里同理
  4. 02:38:750 (8,9) - 只是建议：把这两个物件整体下移一点。8和滑条尾叠起来再接跳的话，对于这段vocal的话flow有些过于曲折了。 :arrow: 那种不喜欢orz
  5. 02:56:293 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - 逐渐加大的跳思路很有意思，但感觉加到后面跳稍微小了点。（或者是02:52:084 - 到02:55:065 - 这段间距有些太大，显得进入高潮的那段强烈的vocal不够突出了） :arrow: vocal就不该突出
  6. 03:07:170 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 对这两个三连我觉得短滑条+单点比纯粹的单点三连要好 :arrow: 太难了
  7. 04:02:784 (5,6,7) - 用三连的第一个note去叠，而不是滑条头 :arrow: 啊，没事的，这只是接用点而已，并不是为了美观
  8. 04:13:135 (5,6) - 建议这两个叠起来，最好把5放在6上。因为vocal强度增大了，在平均间距如此小的地方这样的间距不足以形成反跳，所以不够搭。 :arrow: 算了，那样不喜欢
  9. 04:44:537 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2) - 这两个连打间距我感觉反了。建议前面那个五连搞成大间距，后面那个三连缩小。 :arrow: 我不是这样觉得的
  10. 01:19:060 (5) - whistle？ :arrow: 不好
  11. 01:40:856 (1) - 去掉finish :arrow: bgm里面有
  12. 01:45:768 (1) - 同上。感觉没有必要每个小节都来个finish，太响了。推荐两个小节来一发，因为vocal平均两小节一换气。（实际上从02:17:698 - 开始你就是这样处理的） :arrow: ^
  13. 06:22:607 (1) - 把转盘静音掉 :arrow: ？？？我静音了啊

祝你好运

cmn_891127 wrote:

都是一些排版方面的建议……纯粹是为了好看,然而很多都是没用的
  1. 01:45:066 (7) - 这个note位置并不符合任何形状，又overlap，我大概会做成下面的样子
  2. 01:50:329 (7,1,2,3,5) - 这几个应该比较容易做成五角星吧
  3. 01:54:540 (6,8,9,10) - 我大概会做成正方形
  4. 01:55:943 (3,6) - 稍微移一点，让01:56:645 (5,6,7) - 间距相等
  5. 01:58:399 (2,3,6,7) - 正方形，同时让01:58:926 (6,11) - 相对于(8)对称
  6. 02:01:031 (3,4,5,6,7) - 我应该会围绕前面的(12)做一个十字形
  7. 02:02:259 (10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17) - 用convert slider to stream修正一下弧度
  8. 03:16:117 (5) - 让03:15:942 (4,5,6,7,8) - 成等边三角形
  9. 04:20:502 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 我改了下顺序和位置
  10. 04:41:906 (2,7) - 有一丢丢overlap，稍微错开一些
  11. 05:08:492 - 我觉得break移到这里是没有意义的，尽管是一个重拍，但并不是一段旋律的开始。我会把05:06:818 (1) - 这个去掉，因为这个音很延的，一个note过于短暂，还不如空掉
  12. 04:10:678 (5,6) - 这里距离是不是不太好
  13. 04:12:784 (4,5) - ^
:arrow: 。。。看了下感觉都不想改。。。看看音效摸吧

关于音效
02:18:048 (2,3,4) - 我是不太习惯这种前面两个加鼓，后面空掉的感觉，我觉得可以在(4)上面加whistle，其实是蓝线音效太大声了，如果减小clap音量也好 :arrow: 但是音乐确实是这个样子的，我也没办法
02:20:680 (5) - 同理
thx for the mods
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