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DJ Okawari - Flower Dance

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spboxer3
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2011年2月8日 at 下午 10:47:43

Artist: DJ Okawari
Title: Flower Dance
Tags: Yumeko Yuki
BPM: 100
Filesize: 4377kb
Play Time: 04:00
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1.93 stars, 187 notes)
  2. Hard (4.58 stars, 452 notes)
  3. Normal (2.85 stars, 231 notes)
  4. Yuki YukI (4.83 stars, 591 notes)
Download: DJ Okawari - Flower Dance
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Done
My 1st map
Want you like it~~:D
Guest diff: by Yumeko Yuki


Special Thanks: happy30 to reform map sound!! and the skin for EvianBubble ;)
kanpakyin
Here my mod
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藍色=意見而已
紅色=我覺得你要修改這項
*所有主要的問題都會以粗體顯示
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[General]
加上tag
set a Preview point

強烈建議換掉BG!!

[Easy]
00;26:579(1)clap here
00:27:329(2)上移一格..
00:33:779(3)finish here?
00:57:779(1.3)畫得好一點吧...
01:07:979(5.6)上移一格
01:12:779(x)加個spinner這..到01:13:979結束
01:19:379(4)new combo here
01:37:979(x)加個spinner這到01:33:179結束
01:43:379(1)和(8)對稱
02:49:979(x)加個note在這
03:09:779(1~3)排得不太好看...重新排列?

[Hard]
注意!!這歌是1/4..所以排列的時候請用1/4
此外...這個難度的排列比起easy較差...也許試試re-map較好?
FutakiKanata
:oops: fight
DeadAlready
.__.
KanbeKotori
;)
wmfchris
[Hard]
0:27:329 (2) extend by 1/4
0:28:979 (1) right 1 grid
0:54:029 (3,4) stack properly on ending of slider
1:12:179 (5) up 1 grid
1:38:279 (8,1,2...) left 1 grid
1:53:279 (2) up 1 grid

[normal]
0:27:329 (2,3) spacing
I think fixing what AImod find is good enough for this diff

healing instrumental *W*
star!
Uan
Good map :D
star!!
_lolipop
moded in irc.
star.
yongtw123
Hi hi~
Forum PM recheck.

你確定還是不能submit然後更新內容嗎..?

[Normal]

02:02:573 (6) - 這裡加個note?
02:49:973 (3) - 擺這裡有點彆扭

[Hard]
請開distance snap然後把圖重新看過一次 例如
前面這段00:26:573 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 就有很多spacing錯誤
03:28:673 (3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - spacing不太規則
等等

請多注意spacing變化要有"一致性"
spacing變大了 就持續那個距離乘數直到spacing要變小為止
不要spacing變大了但是突然小回去又大回來

02:02:573 (6) - 這裡加個note?
02:29:273 (1) - 突然來個clap?
04:00:173 (x) - 加個note?


音效部分可能有點缺乏
盡量多用soft-whistle吧
然後[Hard]大部分的間距都有點小
不過這倒是沒什麼大問題

不錯的圖
多加油請人mod吧
star~
SapphireGhost
Change the description so it says something slightly more useful like "This is my nth beatmap, it was uploaded on ___ please enjoy" something like that.

Other than that, this is a beautiful song and I really can't find any problems with the beatmap. Here is a Star for having an AWESOME map!
Lucy_Heartfilia_old
总的
这图不错,没有很大的问题。preview point记得设置一下,在Timing里面可以设置

Easy
00:56:273 这里的2加Clap
00:58:673 同上
01:06:773 同上
01:09:173 同上
01:10:373 2~
01:12:173 4,finish
01:55:373 New combo
最后结束的地方做个标记,因为你MP3没有做全

Hard
00:40:973~00:45:473 你这里是7个1,然后1,2。把他改成1,2,3,4 1,2,3,4,5
01:10:373 1后半 clap
01:12:173 5,finish
01:19:373~01:23:573 这里也是1,2,3,4 1,2,3,4 如果你时间多改下吧,没时间就算了,因为你这里都设了0.25拍clap,重新弄也满烦的,上面的一组也是
01:38:573~01:43:073 同上,我是因为听到前面4组音调和后面4组音调分别一样才建议这样取combo的

温心留言
听起来让人好温心以及感伤的音乐,做的挺不错,没有很大的问题,音效也动过脑筋了,看的出的。期待早日RANK
Star
MoonShade
Everything seems fine, just some "beauty modding", you don't have to follow any of my suggestions

[Easy]
00:45:773 (1) - i suggest symmetric sliders, example:
also place this more to the top to avoid unwanted overlapping with 00:45:173 (5)
01:02:573 (1) - what about a finish instead of a whistle?
01:25:373 (3) - maybe make this more symmetric?
01:39:773 (4,7) - maybe unwanted overlapping?
01:44:573 (2) - should be more symmetric
02:02:573 (6) - add finish sound
02:28:973 (1) - you can add finish if you like
02:42:173 (3,5) - unwanted overlapping?
02:46:973 (3,1) - ^
02:57:773 (1) - add finish

[Hard]
00:36:923 (3) - one grid left
01:04:073 (6,7) - you could use grid level 4 here to move it one grid left
01:04:373 (7) - finish instead of clap
01:12:173 (5) - one grid up
01:32:573 (9) - maybe add finish
01:43:073 (1) - whistle instead of finish
01:43:373 (1) - finish instead of whistle
02:29:273 (1) - finish instead of clap?
02:44:873 (3,2) - unwanted overlapping

Nice Map, Star :3

indyinyou
hi my suggestions ~


[easy]
00:56:273 : remove clap
00:56:573 : remove clap
00:58:673 : remove clap
[hard]
01:32:873 : add silder end at 01:33:173
01:51:773 : this silder end at 01:52:673
02:57:773 : this spin end at 02:59:573
03:19:373 : this spin end at 03:21:173
03:31:073 : add note ?

and star
kanpakyin
All diff finish?
Move to Pending =w=
Vanmonky
As your request.

Read this first for the icon explanation.
- [?] Asking for second thought.
- [!] Fatal error. You have to fix this for sure.
- [No icon] Only a suggestion.
*If you have something to ask, PM me*

[General]
1. Add the source and some tags. To increase the possibility of the map's appearance in search mode.
2. I see a potential from you. Keep mapping!
3. I suggest you to change the background. Find another image which is 800x600.
4. The overall difficulty of [Easy] and [Hard] are the same. Why don't decrease the [Easy]'s OD or/and increase the [Hard]'s?
5. Set the preview time to all diffs. Timing > Set Current Position as Preview Time. [!]

[Easy]
-- Looks like normal diff. You may change the diff's name into [Normal] if you want to.

00:52:973 (5) - New combo. [?]
01:31:673 - This will be better if you insert break time here.
02:38:873 - ^

[Hard]
00:32:873 (4,5,6) - Move one small grid down. *nazi lol*
00:40:223 (7) - This sudden jump disturb me while playing. I kinda don't like it. You may ignore this. [?]
00:44:573 (1,1) - The spacing changes so sudden X|
02:56:273 (2,4) - Stack them under the sliders properly.
03:38:573 (1,2,3,4,5) - Move one small grid down. *nazi lol*
03:58:973 (5) - What a sudden change of spacing. Move this farther from (4).[!]
04:00:173 (6) - I suggest you to move this to below of the screen.
That's all I can mod. It has been long time since I modded last time, and just started now, so sorry if I do something wrong.
Yumeko Yuki
HI~ :)
总的来说不错 不过有些地方感觉节奏有点空 可以适当的添加些circle
[Hard]
00:32:873-00:33:173 (4) 改用1/6的回转slider
00:52:973 (1) 往左移一格
01:11:273-01:11:573 (3) 改用1/6的回转slider
01:30:473-01:30:773 (4) ^
01:54:473 (6) 往上移一格
03:39:773 (5) 加个timing把kiai去掉 break区域里最好不要有kiai 虽然问题不大? :?

基本上就这么多了 我本人也非常喜欢Okawari的歌 只可惜没时间做Guestdiff :(
Good luck star~~
Colin Hou
[General]:
  1. 别忘了preview point
[Easy]:
  1. 这个难度并没有理由不做完, 没有任何分数问题, 所以建议还是做到和Hard一样的结束点
  2. slider velocity (在timing页里可以看到) 也就是slider的速率 1.4对于一个Easy难度太高了 如果这个难度是Normal还勉强说得过去
[Hard]:
  1. 03:58:973 (5) - newcombo 或者是按照spacing来
感觉Hard应该比Easy完成的时间早很多, 因为完全不像是一个人做出来的 Easy在很多方面都强过Hard不少 +_+

其他没什么 比第一次让我看的图强很多了 XD 加油~
kanpakyin
As your Re-check request:

BluE=Suggestion only
ReD=I think you should fix this
*Major issue are in Bold

[Genernal]
關掉countdown
Offset貌似好像有點問題?
統一Kiai
考慮使用sliderslide

[Easy]
00:26:573(1)-Whistle
00:27:773(2)-^
00:57:773(1.3)-Nazi一下..難看了..
01:20:573(3)-除掉whistle
01:31:673(x)-weird break..map something here
01:38:573(1~8)-這樣排不好看喔
02:40:973(1~)好長的貪吃蛇啊0.0/
03:08:873(6)-令到players混亂/錯判
03:21:773(~)為甚麼在這裡停?..map到最後把..

[Hard]
為甚麼是SP3's hard?..這張map是你的..也沒有Guest diff..就把SP3去掉
這個難度我無從入手...如果不介意...我還真的是建議你Re-map
1.太貪吃蛇...
2.DS變得不好...
3.排列也沒easy好..
先就這樣...
Xgor
[General]
I know A Cup of Coffee is the name of the single where this song appears but it shouldn't be in the source. viewtopic.php?f=6&t=24765&st=0&sk=t&sd=a&hilit=album+source&start=0
Just having it in the tags is enough.

There is no preview point, please add one on all difficulties (To add one, go to timing> set Preview point and it will be set where you are currently on the timeline)
I suggest you place it on 01:43:373

Combo colour 1 and 2 looks almost too similar on the hit circle, I suggest you change one of those colours into something else (I suggest Yellow)

Kinda wish that both difficulties had the same length.

[Easy]
I would call this more of an Normal than a Easy due to the mayor usage of 1/2 in the later parts in the difficulty.

Raise stacking latency so 03:07:973 (5,6) looks more pretty

00:34:073 (1) - Add new combo.
01:02:573 (1) - ^
01:18:173 (4,5) - Why this mini-jump here, doesn't make any sense and looks kinda weird, I suggest you just distance snap this.
02:28:973 (1) - Add new combo?
02:57:773 (1) - Add new combo.
03:17:273 (1) - ^

[sp3's Hard]
You don't need sp3's in the name as you did it :P

The last break felt just random and I would preferred if you mapped there.

00:34:073 (1) - New combo
00:40:973 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - This looks much much more like there should be one repeat in those short repeating sliders due to the spacing but there is two repeats.
Please remove one repeat on all those sliders or make the sliders ends much much closer to each other.
01:19:373 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Same as above.
02:28:673 (5) - Why is this further away from the rest, putting this under (3) would make more sense. (or at least something where it's in the same distance as the rest)
03:19:373 (1) - Add new combo.

Pretty nice song that reminds me of those Haru remixes floating around here and pretty nice for being your first map.
Bit of stuff that needs to be checked out and fixed though but it's nice enough for a star.
*star*
NoHitter
General
Perhaps you could make an intermediate difficulty? Like a Normal?

Easy
01:42:173 (8) - Minor spacing error.
02:21:773 (1,2,3) - These sliders don't feel right. IMO just change it to this.
03:01:973 (3) - Something about the repeat feels odd. IMO remove the repeat then add a note instead. New combo that note. Like this
03:07:673 (4) - New combo
03:42:173 (X) - Make the kiai here consistent with Hard, but IMO you should map this part instead.

Hard
00:40:223 (7,8) - Spacing
01:04:073 (6,7) - [nazi] Place in the center of (4,5)?
01:05:573 (2) - This seems fairly simple compared to other patterns.
03:43:373 (x) - Map this part.
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