This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on dimanche 30 novembre 2008 at 14:59:18

Artist: IOSYS
Title: Alice > Dere
Tags: alice dere sweet iosys
BPM: 128
Filesize: 6025kb
Play Time: 04:23
Difficulties Available:

1. Easy (0,31 stars, 88 notes)
2. Hard (3,88 stars, 350 notes)
3. Insane (4,71 stars, 481 notes)
4. Normal (2,44 stars, 286 notes)

Download: IOSYS - Alice > Dere
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My first map <w< I hope you'll like it, but it isn't perfect at all -
Thanks to: Mafiamaster, Card N'force, kingcobra52, James, buraimaster1234&m980 for advices.
Thanks to Ema Skye for her irl help.

Offset: 15730
Resnap to 1/4 divisor.

Mafiamaster's Suggestions on (Hard):
01:03:07 (1) - a little shorter then move 2 closer.

Star slider 01:07:99 (1) - Do something to make it a little longer where it reaches the white tick.

01:20:18 (2) - Make this slider the same length as Slider 1, then move Slider 3 left by 1.

01:46:55 (5) - to 01:46:66 (5) then make it a little shorter.
Same thing with 01:50:30 (5) - to 01:50:41 (5) - then make it a little shorter.

02:34:36 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - all moved to 02:34:48.
Same thing with 02:41:86 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - to 02:41:98 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9).

Slider 04:00:37 (12) - to 04:00:49 (12) then fix it.

04:03:42 (13,14,15) - to 04:03:54 (13,14,15).

04:15:37 (12) - to 04:15:49 (12) then fix it by making it a tad bit shorter.

I only checked hard by the way.
IOSYS!!

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Ooook, timing is good.
You did quite well for a first map, and is also a set of 4 difficulties ^^
Anyway, you forgot to resnap the beats after changing offset (if you did it, fix them manually, cause they're all messed up) and there are quite spacing issues. Such as
- Easy:
00:19:48 (4) - jumping so far from the 3 before isn't easy. If you think about 00:21:70 (5) then it's almost absurd XD
- Normal:
00:18:54 (4,5,6) - if they have a 1/1 distance in timeline thay can't have the same spacing as the 2/1 beats.
00:29:79 (10,11) - too far
- Hard:
00:48:07 (10,11,12) - too far
00:51:82 (10,11,12) - same
01:26:98 (7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17) - this one is good. If you check the image belove you'll understand why.
- Insane:
00:30:14 (3,4) - why making them so far away unlike other similiar combos? XD
01:07:29 (2,1) - how come the spacing is higher than 01:06:82 (1,2,1)?

I didn't write all your mistakes but just a few examples. Check here for a reference about what I mean.
And another thing: use grid level 3 or you'll fail at placing beats in the grid.

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

Check here for a reference about what I mean.

Fixed.

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bump! I need advice..

When I downloaded it, I only got the Insane difficulty for some reason. Try resubmitting.

Some issues with Insane though:

00:20:41 (5) - Make this 1/2 beat longer. snap the notes ahead accordingly.
01:07:99 (1) - Make 1/4 beat longer. Keep the heart shape though.
01:11:86 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - Shift 1/4 beat forward. (all of them should be on white ticks)
01:17:48 (1) - Shift 1/4 forward and decrease the length by 1/4.
01:22:87 (1) - See above.
01:30:49 (12) - This slider overlaps. You'll need to reposition the start/end points so that it doesn't.
01:47:48 (2,3,4,5) - Shift 1/4 forward.
01:50:41 (1) - Extend 1/4 beat.
02:37:87 (5) - Shift 1/4 forward.
02:45:49 (3) - You'll need to extend this 1/4 beat.
02:49:36 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15) - Shift 1/4 forward (so they're on white/red ticks)
03:00:49 (1) - Make this last 1/4 longer.
03:06:35 (1) - Add 1 more repeat.
03:41:86 (1) - Shift 1/4 forward, End 1/4 earlier.

03:45:61 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,1,1,1,1,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Shift 1/4 foward.
Also with 03:49:24 (5,6,7,8,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Space these out a bit more so they'll look different from the eighth notes that come later.
One more thing: I recommend you have your notes here arranged to something like this (look at the timeline): http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot010-5.png
It's a bit confusing the way it is now.

04:04:36 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Shift 1/4 forward.
04:07:87 (1) - Shift 1/4 forward, decrease length by 1/4.
04:15:37 (1,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Shift 1/4 forward again.
04:23:23 (1) - Shift 1/2 beat back, I also recommend ending at the white tick at around 4:27.

In addition, you might also want to increase the tick rate a bit, since you have some long sliders with a fast hp drain rate. I recommend 1.

Overall, very nice for your first map and good song choice too.

not sure about the timing, but add +10 offset i guess?

insane:
i think overall difficulty is too much, try using 8?
00:20:41 (5) - end the slider at 00:20:886
00:27:91 (5) - hmmm i suggest to flip this slider vertical (looks like letter J or L) and move it at the left-center side, tail of the slider should be near circle 6, i hope you get what i mean.
01:11:862 (1)~01:13:73 (3) - move em 1/4 beat forward
01:22:87 (1) - slider starts 1/4 beat early
01:30:49 (12) - i suggest to reposition the beginning and end of the slider, it is confusing.
02:37:87 (5) - move this by 1/4 beat forward
02:45:61 (3) - now this one ends 1/4 beat early
02:49:36 (4)~02:52:87 (15) - move them by 1/4 beat forward
03:00:49 (1) - move the end of the spinner by 1/4 beat forward, sounds better
03:06:35 (1) - end the repeat at 03:07:761
03:45:61 (1)~03:54:28 (1) - move 1/4 beat forward
04:04:36 (1)~04:07:17 (11) - move 1/4 beat forward -__-
04:07:87 (1) - start the slider at 04:07:995.
04:15:37 (1)~04:21:70 (10) - move 1/4 beat forward -____________________________________________-
04:23:23 (1) - start the slider at 04:22:995

hard:
01:06:35 (9) - use the same spacing as you did with the other combo
01:15:37 (1) - start the slider at 01:15:495
01:30:49 (1) - end the slider at 01:35:886, dont forget to fix the break
01:46:55 (5) - move 1/4 beat forward (here we go again)
01:50:30 (5) - "
02:41:511 - put a circle here, because i'm awesome.
02:45:37 (1) - move the spinner by 1/4 beat forward
03:00:37 (1) - start at 03:00:495 and end it at 03:03:542
03:07:99 (4) - move 1/2 beat forward
03:09:05 (5) - move 1/4 beat forward
03:49:48 (1) - end the slider at 03:54:401
04:07:87 (1) - you know what to do
04:15:37 (12) - start the slider at 04:15:495
04:21:35 (9) - you know what to do

normal: (im getting lazy/tired now, same mistakes in hard/insane)
00:26:98 (7) - spacing
those spinners, check them, same thing you did in hard/insane
01:22:87 (1) - you know what to do
01:30:49 (1) - sigh
01:53:23 (1) - you know what to do
Test 2: Fill in the blanks.
02:30:61 (1) -
02:45:49 (1) -
04:10:10 (5) -
04:11:86 (1)~04:15:14 (8) -
04:15:61 (1) -
04:19:36 (1) -

easy: (based on the past errors above, you should know what is wrong with easy)
im not mentioning anymore other wrong stuffs in easy that appeared in normal/hard/insane, ok?
00:48:89 (2) -
02:23:11 (1) -
02:26:39 (3) -
02:37:87 (1) - move 1/4 beat forward
03:00:37 (3) - move 1/4 beat forward
03:02:25 (1) -
03:38:11 (1) - move 1 and 2 1/4 beat forward
03:45:14 (5) - move 1/4 beat forward
03:59:67 (3) -
04:04:48 (1) - end this at 04:11:276
.. and the last spinner

did you copy paste? because it looks like it. learn to hate copy pasting.. i hope you didnt copy paste.
a copy-pasted section/combo with a mistake will just make mods take more time to mod a map.

i can be really nazi about modding this but i dont want to spend 1++ hours typing, because i already spent an hour of it.
so i just leave the not so obvious ones as is.

P.S. not really one hour, more like almost two hours. havent even included the minor ones.
please triple/quadruple check your map before uploading.

If I were BAT, this would be bubbled.

are you stupid? or an idiot? or both? you have no place in the beatmap moderation team. you fail already.

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sorry i was just pissed off last night about something. and at the same time im checking out your map.

basically those blanks are just the same errors/mistakes similar to the ones i mentioned already.

checking it again right now...

EDIT:
no i am not checking it again, i'll just attach the osu files later
its faster that way.

EDIT2:
here goes~

P.S. please remove some of the whistles/claps on all difficulties, i think it is overused...
and i moved/adjusted some of the notes and sliders..

Download: IOSYS - Alice Dere (Nya) [Easy].osu

Download: IOSYS - Alice Dere (Nya) [Hard].osu

Download: IOSYS - Alice Dere (Nya) [Insane].osu

Download: IOSYS - Alice Dere (Nya) [Normal].osu

Ah, doesn't matter, everybody can be angry sometimes <.<;
Thank you, I'll remove claps&whistles in some parts and reupload.

EDIT: submitted.

all good to me~

i'll let other mods to check out those acceptable flaws (for me)

and yeah, just take a look at those spinners/sliders i fixed, all of them are not placed at the blue tick anymore.

Thanks for bubbling. ^-^

Bump. D:

yeh, D:

Bump of the day..

I'll start a conversation with myself bump